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rider68

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A Soul’s Journey To Peace

Huntington's Disease is a fatal degenerative brain disorder that slowly destroys both body and mind. Described in 1872 by Long Island physician Dr. George Huntington, the condition came to be known as Huntington's Chorea, a reference to the dance-like, or choreic, movements which are often its most visible characteristic.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Title change due to editing, Helped by Great friends...Thanks All
Title Suggested by Chrystalie.....Whom I deeply Respect........Thank you....
Peter

Sounds movement,
Sitting outside….
Park bench?
Doesn’t make any sense,
China clinking, slurping of tea,
Mug fixed, straw turned away,
You’d think, they would offer me,

                              “Hi John, you're back”
“Back”,
Was I gone, stupid cow,
I was sitting here,
Here what, where, how,
Must work this out,
Get your hands off me
Bloody woman,
Keeps annoying me,
                               “Oh John, its me; your wife, the garden,
                                    Isn’t it beautiful”, She thinks; If only you could speak to me,
                               “Mum” …”Yes son”…. “Dad”…”He…..’s going son”
Mind drifting
Meeting the mid morning breeze,
Body and spirit,
Begging to be free
Form, wheeled around
like a broken machine,
                                “It’s time to get you in dad”
Retorting blindly, lost vision,
Words failing can’t speak,
No thought, can’t think,
Soul;
Spinning out of control,
glazed eyes, transfixed
Looking out to…..;
Waves breaking,
To……..
                                “Something’s wrong”… “What”… “I think its time”
Body writhing,
To violent convulsing,
Life drains;
Memory fades,
Siren’s; sounding,
Flashing blue lights,Parked up alone,
Cued in corridor,
                                 Tears, crying echo’s silently,
Staring eyes glued,
Assessments reports,
Staff - consults,
Reports tests,
Report results,
Surgeon probing,
Short circuit, electric shock,
Heart flickers, spasms,
Grabbing resuscitation leads,
To standing back,
Shock, (again) shock, (again) shock,
Flat line
Blank screen
Cursor blinking, blinking, blinks…….,
Black screen
Staff look on,
As the family Bereave,
Silently........

— rider68, Jun 06, 2008

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Wordview

18 years 1 month ago

Wonderful

A really wonderful play on word association.I suspect this poem contains alot of hidden meaning as well.The title speaks perfectly to the emotion you have brought across,all in all a great write!

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18 years 1 month ago

Wonderful......

Thanks Wordview It's close to where i wanted it but if you read Jess's comment below he has hit the nail on the head,will require further works to it, Thanks for reading, and sharing your views, Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

18 years 1 month ago

Brave work Peter

The unspoken thoughts work best in conveying the frustration and isolation the sufferer must feel. The analogy to a failing machine I am not so sure about, it perhaps detracts from the emotional impact of the poem. Maybe more thoughts and feelings, less machine, but not lose it altogether. I could well be wrong there, perhaps you meant to convey the sense that the sufferer or those around perceive them to be a dysfunction, stripping away their humanity. But it is that humanity which seems to have been lost a little in the poem. cheers, Jess

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18 years 1 month ago

Brave work Peter

Hi Jess I was hoping that you would read this, as it's outside my comfort zone, wasn't sure wheather to post at one stage, Your conclusion was/is spot on, The last moments very dehumanising, I had changed this so many times, at the same time trying to hold the frame of it together, sadly it swung to far the other way........ But it's great that you havn't dismissed it out of hand, But i'll take it back to the drawing board for now, Thanks again Jess Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

18 years 1 month ago

do i often dismiss out of hand?

seriously i want some feedback here, yours or others poets. I know I sometimes do that in bad moods. Please tell me if and when I do. Crikey, it's essential to NeoPoet that we don't do that and you know I am not above criticism. Sorry if I don't comment on your or other's poetry often, the site is so big now, it is wonderful but also a bit of a transition for me and others who used to be able to respond to everyone daily. Now we must care for eveyone as best we can. I try to schedule time for newcomers, time for friends and site work. It has never stopped being fun, but I can't be there for everyone. To you and anyone who reads this comment, if you feel you haven't got enough response from your poem PM me or any Advocate. It's ok to ask. cheers, Jess

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18 years 1 month ago

Do i often dismiss out of hand?

Jess It was a sweeping statement a generalization, The reason that i said that i hoped you would read, is for the fact that, Being the writer, i could have been barking up the wrong tree, as i said out of my comfort zone, But had that been the case, You would have said honestly,...Subject matter is so important, and as I don't have a particular sway, strength, to a particular subject, You'd normally give constructive direction, Which I personally respect, and thank you for........ anyway...Enough of the soppey stuff, Can't have head swelling Aussie's, It's not good for you suffering in the midday sun.......LOL Very Best Regards......Peter, But having read all the fine comments, from people I give a lot of respect to, It seems there is a split of opinions, Some favouring the detachment,I still think a small change to slightly Humanise, ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

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poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

Choreic

movement throughout the entire poem , lends to the credibility. I would agree with Jess in that less machine i needed here. The impatience of the pron and the careless attitude of those around them is there but not strong enough Chrystalie

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18 years 1 month ago

Hi Chry's

To share and help all to understand, what or where i was, when writing, 2 weeks today, Had just buried my Father in-law, being honest, a very kind release, the closing to a sad 26yrs of suffering, The finale hours were shocking, sparing the details, his demise was not good, The final hours were quite hideous, laid out like a slab of meat, All the immediate family at hand, sighting / looking at a de-humanised figure, I couldn’t relate at all to the former person, that once I’d known, So respectfully it had influenced my writing, I suppose trying to find the point of,- Not being personal and maintaining respect, showing some sort of detachment, So taking it all in all, I am somewhat pleased that what I set out to do has somewhat Been conveyed….. this subject is never going to win awards, but I feel that I shouldn’t Shy away from a challenge, good or bad….if we don’t try we/I can’t, won’t grow. But respectfully i take on board your comments, and i tend to agree that it has swung to far...so some altering to be done, Thanks Chrys As always for your support and comments, Respectfully Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

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DarkinAZ

18 years 1 month ago

Great write,

I like the machine part of it actually, to me it shows the "disconnect" the doctors and nurses ect.. have to have. The death of a machine is much more exceptable than the loss of a patient, a human being. Sincerely, Mark

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18 years 1 month ago

Great write,

Hi Mark how right you you are, if you read the former replies, it will relay exactly your point, As for staff, in fairness to them, if they didn't detatch themselve's, they wouldn't be able to do the job, the blending of the machine part, was a way of, allowing others to read without being harrowed, I personally wouldn't want to open past wounds for some-one else's loss, But having said what i have said does that weaken the deliverey? the strengh of the poem,......I wonder, It's a crazey world a melting pot of thought's and views, As always Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

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18 years 1 month ago

To

write about a subject as distressing as this takes a very special poet, the people who have commented on your work have understanding of great depth i read their comments and these comments made me think-Regards to you Peter

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18 years 1 month ago

Hi Pink

Truly I thank you for your thought’s and of course your comments,” Yes" it is distressing and I did fight within myself,....... Thinking should I leave best alone, and find some thing else to write, The trouble was once the thought process was challenged I couldn't walk by without trying, I blush and smile to your point of a special poet, (if only) sorry I’m not disrespecting your kind words, I suppose the truth is I just don't see myself as special, Just a mere beginner, What I think is special, is this magnetic attraction, That this site has, People unknown to each other, coming together from all different walks of life, sharing words, time, and thought's, the passing of experience's, giving guidance and general friendship, I find it very humbling, and so very glad that I am a part of it, passing time and words with people such as yourself....Thank you Take Care and have a great weekend Very Kindest Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

18 years 1 month ago

Peter!

Incredible job done here, friend. I like how the whole second stanza, you don't know if it's about a vehicle, or a person. First glance would seem a vehicle - REAL read could/would reveal a human. I agree with some points that Jess T. made - there's a good deal of machinery; however, I feel that it is fitting. Like Mark said, there is a sort of detachment that the medical personnel need to find - however, I see a deeper meaning. (warning: tangent about to start) The overall working populace could be seen as a machine. We're all soulless, empty robots - shells of people, working - frittering time away, putting in our efforts for the greater gain of the 1% of the populace that ISN'T us. The rich, the government, we basically slave for them. Based on our last volleying of thoughts, I have a small hunch that this is kind of what you're going for?? (could be very much wrong) All in all, no matter what was meant, very thought-provoking. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------- ~ "The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots and tyrants." - Thomas Jefferson ~ "Tonight's forcast: dark, continued dark tonight, turning to partly light in the morning..." - George Carlin

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18 years 1 month ago

Hi Jess

Jess How cleverly perceived, and to be fair, in the scheme of things generally, and a cynics point of view, that’s all we are reproductive machines, My first attempt was too much....sort of so...so, what i mean is like just reciting the closing moments, the problem was how to inject something into it, without being disrespectful, and enticing the reader to read, controversy is good, and due to the subject matter, will always stir the emotion, I just tried to find a way through the middle, I think in fairness, it does require some editing, bringing it more into middle ground, The changes will be slight; hopefully you could let me know what you think. Thanks Jess as always, Very Best Regards Peter. ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

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18 years 1 month ago

Peter

such a long reply to my sparse words- i find it hard to feel humble it is a quality i lack, seriously - i am honoured by your reply, because to me you do seem a serious thinking person and to me you are a tremendous poet -i c'ant figure out why you have given me so many words, seriously, i am not looking for more compliments you have given me far too many already, and by the looks of it i am not the only person who feels a great range of differing emotions from reading the different subjects of your poems,therefore i have come to the conclusion by reading this site that a hell of a lot of members of this site get a great deal from your work, if you do please pardon my somewhat crude expression Peter -PLEASE Peter DO NOT reply back you have given me far too many words already-REGARDS

18 years 1 month ago

Peter

I like your revisions glad you didn't give up, for this is a great piece! So sorry for your loss and the suffering the whole family had to go through. Don't have any suggestions for a title, but I know you will come up with something when all is quiet~

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18 years 1 month ago

Hi Janice and Thanks

I know it a tender subject, I felt that some how i wanted to portray the account with some dignity, The first attempt was, after reading to impersonal, Thanks for taking the trouble to read, Thanks again for commenting, Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

18 years 1 month ago

Wow, you have really turned this around,

and, in my opinion, lost nothing. Powerful, visceral work that draws us in rather than push us away. It works. cheers, Jess

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18 years 1 month ago

Wow, you have really turned this around

Hi Jess Comments like that is enough to make a pommy's head swell, Thanks for taking the time to read again, although not mainstream, I'm glad I embraced the challenge. Thanks again Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

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poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

Peter

Before I read your response to my comments I read (re read your poem(. My God Peter you've managed to reduce me to tears. I asked for a little more human and I got it in spades. The changes you have made to this poem are outstanding tears and chills.. I'm sorry for your and and hope this writing gave you some peace. outstanding and brilliant Chrystalie How about One's Soul's Journey or A Soul's Journey To Peace

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18 years 1 month ago

Tears and chills

Hi Chrystalie I hope i don't sound cold, but whilst the day was emotional, personally it was a great release, I had personally thought that this is one of those occasions when, euthanasia should have been an option, I feel that this is still quite respectful, which is what i wanted to maintain, I'm glad you approve of the change's, as for heading.... I rather like (A Soul’s Journey To Peace) I think this is very fitting, Thank you for your thought's and great suggestions, I will dwell on the title a little longer.. Take care Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

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poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

Peter

Not cold at all . Humane is the word here. I couldn't agree with your more Chrystalie

18 years 1 month ago

Peter

On the whole, I have to agree with Jess, a little more humanization. This is a good read and covers a lot of emotion. I think I would limit the machinery a little more. This is a trivial point, but you might want to clarify a point for me. is it "your back?" as in your back hurts or is it "you're back" and in you have returned? Wonderful read. Rett

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18 years 1 month ago

A Souls Journey To Peace

An extremely romantic title when you are dead there is nothing , nothing is experienced and there is no journey to anywhere that is why I find it EXTREMELY difficult to face death -Death is in fact an extremely hard matter to face and when you die in hospital with machines around you it is i should imagine it is cold clinical, though doctors and nurses who do a great job try to save you with these machines-I d'ont believe they can detach themselves totally not even with patients they do not get to know, though they are somewhat detached as these are matters they deal with often, the death of very young children probably has some impact esp if they have children of their own-When i was a child my father a fireman sat in the sitting room in the dark with his head in his hands, i ran in to talk to him and he was too distressed to talk to me i wondered what was wrong and was dismayed-Years later he brought this up as he felt i was old enough approx 13yrs, he told me he had gone into a fire and saw 2 toddlers swollen with heat dead in the fire this without a doubt made him feel for want of a better word distressed, therefore i think i know that doctors and nurses feel under the weather sometimes to say the least, and you have to do the next shift-My point is i felt it was extremely brave of you to write this poem expressing these realities-To be honest with you i find the realities of illness and death to painful to write about i shall admit this ,THAT IS WHY I AM OVERWHELMED AND RESPECT TO A VERY GREAT EXTENT POETS THAT DO THIS, PURPLE MOON DOLL HAS DONE THIS LIKE YOURSELF-Also may i add a lecturer at a summer school i attended introduced me to a poem by Seamus Heaney in which Mr Heaney writes about a fireman poet, i'm glad this poem of Mr Heaneys' was brought to my attention-My deepest regards to you Peter-

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18 years 1 month ago

Hi Rett

To the point you have made about "Back" yes you are right it should read you're.......Thanks for seeing that I will correct, But being honest to the other points you raise, I feel that this is about right.... Think in terms of the advanced stages of this disease it's very dehumanizing, Rett there is quite a lot of reference made via comments earlier, I attended my father In-laws funeral just a couple of weeks ago, The original was very machine....trying to find middle ground, not wanting to open wounds for anyone that has had to live with the outcome, But so far it has been 2-1 in favour.. (since the ammendments) I shall let it run and see if any one else feels the same, Thanks for finding this, and giving your time and thoughts. Kindest Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

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18 years 1 month ago

Peter

please bear with me, it has sunk in now that this disease is de-generative a fact that readers on this site at least had the decency to understand-Do you think now then that people may be best left alone to die in circumstances less frantic than hospitals with machines when nothing can be done for them-I shall read your poem again Peter now, please excuse my lack of understanding Peter, although i am a lady of some years i am extremely naieve- do you think Peter modern medicine has gone beserk, for example people say medical practice has intervened far too much in childbirth, a process that should be natural -I am not expecting a reply Peter I am just leaving these thoughts, even though they are in questions-Sincerest Regards Pinksheep-please excuse the spelling mistakes they are getting even worse-

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18 years 1 month ago

Hi Pink

So many thoughts and questions, hard knowing where to start, Prior to the intervention of medicine, life expectancy was far far less, I think personally; quality of life is far more important, - to me anyway, I believe there is a point when being honest, is it right to carry on?, It's to this, that I feel is covered with mixed feelings, individuals can go pass the point of the right to choose, and families tend to want to hold on, they aren’t able to let go, grief can be so intoxicating, Nature has a way, a process, to which there is no forgiveness, that being survival, which was the principles of stone age man, But where the human race has become- domesticated and great advances in medicine......Yet in the scheme of advancement we have barely begun to understand, Childbirth...For fear of upsetting any-one, I will leave this alone. Pink as to the poem, from your response, I think the penny has dropped.. Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

18 years 1 month ago

Hi Peter...

just read your poem and without reading the others comments I had to hurry here to tell you how much I liked this piece.. this is truly a writer putting himself in the situation.. and so well done too.. puts the reader there... Richard

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18 years 1 month ago

Hi Richard and Thank you

I'm very glad that you found this one, The issue was deciding firstly to write, then to try and keep the dignity, There have been some major changes to get it where it is, Thanks again Richard, for your time and comments. Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

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18 years 1 month ago

A strikingly, I think, empathetic ...

piece. In a contrary way, you remind me distantly of my experience of my son's autism. He, being too far from me in his person, at his core, was practically invisible to me. Whoever he was didn't compute. I could never know him. Especially disappointing was the fact I normally experience a heightened sense of walking in others' shoes---and in his case it just was not true. Thanx much, Chuck PS: Brian died at age 20 ... from the effects of cystic fibrosis.

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18 years 1 month ago

Hi Chuck

Firstly so sorry for your loss, cystic fibrosis, is so bloody cruel, there are many stages of autism and a huge challenge within its self, I will say no more...as not having first hand experience, couldn't profess to understand the daily complexities, The reason for writing this particular subject, is down to burying my father in-law, having suffered progressively over the last 20yrs, the closing days, were very demeaning. My main concern, was to try and keep a dignified account, Being that this disease is de-humanizing, and of fear of causing any upset to others. Thanks Chuck for sharing a very personal thought, Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

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poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

Peter

Thank you . You've given me far to much credit. Good to see it all worked out outstanding Chrystalie

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18 years 1 month ago

You’ve given me far to much credit.

The sad truth is, not enough credit is given to people like yourself, You give freely of your time, and solid thoughts and suggestions, a life time of your wealth and experience, and for what? Hopefully when people say thanks i hope now and again, they think about what they are saying thank you for, Outside of this community I don't have access to like minded people that I can tap into, It's quite intoxicating in a nice way, Poetry can be very personal, and for some this maybe a new a new direction, or a longing which they are just beginning. To be encouraged, in the right way, at this stage, can be the make or break of so many, Take care and very best wishes, for goods things to come. Thanks Chrys Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

18 years 1 month ago

Peter

I must say it is even better than first read. Very good and very touching. Also extremely thought provoking. I am almost hesitant to say this as it seems so nit-picking, but the way I read it, the line "Hi John, your back" should read to me, "Hi John, you're back". I think you have a really good one here. I am impressed. Rett

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18 years 1 month ago

Thanks Rett

Thanks very much for re-reading, I am pleased that you like this adaption, I know it's not a good/nice subject, but then life isn't, always, The point you raise about “Hi John, you’re back”. you're being stressed i think is right. thanks i will edit, Take Care and - Very Best Regards. Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

18 years 1 month ago

Great

Smiles:) Barbara great drama like enjoyed. glimpse into a horrible world, few realize even me great write.

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18 years 1 month ago

Hi Barara

For the writing and accounting of the work, thanks for reading, But i hope Barbara, that you never get to know' It's not a place anyone should have to see, or be effected by, As alaways...Thanks for your comments and thoughts...... Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

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poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

peter

bravo, you made spotlight this poem deserves the spotlight you put a lot of work and emotion sacrifice into this work Chrystalie

18 years 1 month ago

Congratulations on making

Congratulations on making the Spotlight, Peter. Excellent work! To be honest with you, I cannot objectively comment on the piece because of losing my own father-in-law to ALS in April ... I'd get too emotional. You touched my heart with this one, though. Best, Ronda

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18 years 1 month ago

Thank you Ronda

I'm sorry that you have had to face this personally, I think for the fact that like you being an inlaw, allowed me the distance to be able to write, although it did have it's moments, My concern was trying to keep it respectable, Hoping not to upset, but just, open a window to the closing moments, the constant thought of keeping it dignified, was very inportant. Sorry if it has touched a nerve, these personal moments can be quite taxing, Thanks for sharing and taking the time to comment, Very Kindest Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

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purplemoondoll

18 years 1 month ago

Incredible writing, truly

Incredible writing, truly incredible. The last verse absolutely blew me away, I lived every line and emotion. Excellent. Congratulations - this is a very very well deserved spotlight poem. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

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18 years 1 month ago

Incredible writing, truly

Hi Kaz...... Thanks for such kind thoughts, for the writing and the artistic input, i have to say i am really pleased, sadly the subject is not as nice, Thanks again Kaz keep well,... Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

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leonard daranjo

18 years 1 month ago

Hi Peter

Incredible piece Peter - lovely flow, great structure but I dont much care for the title. In my humble opinion, it doesn't quite fit - just an opinion. I quite like the machine part - I find it symbolic and quite apt in this case. Reminds me of the travails we went through when my father suffered for 12 days before dying - machines buzzing; doctors and nurses scurrying around; family members alternating between hope and hopelessness until the machine said it all: it flickered frantically and then just went silent. I guess writing this must have been emotionally draining. I want to write something about my experience but I have not been able to get down to it. Not only is this a great piece but it is also a courageous one. Warm regards ... Leonard

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18 years 1 month ago

Hi Leonard

This has gone through a somewhat metamorphous change, before all the editing I had great doubts on posting, due to the subject, Secondly is it poetry? .....in the broadest sense, My thoughts were quelled once I posted, it was received quite well, The title then, was a (Dying Machine) and the words were themed along the lines of A machine, in-sighting a human, But to be fair, being close to my heart, the fact,We had just buried my father inlaw; I took another stab, being encouraged by the general comments, Once the alterations had been made, the title seemed not to fit, as the machine part Mostly, had been written out, Chrystalie made the suggestion, (fitting) to be honest Having known of his lost struggles, to find any quality of life, As the title suggests Hoping his soul finds peace, whilst the title is somewhat unusual, in this instance it is suited, Thanks Leonard, and I hope that my explanation gives fair reason, Please don’t be offended, Very Kindest Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

18 years 1 month ago

When a human being becomes a

When a human being becomes a *poet*, s/he has skinned all layers of truth from their naked bones, vultures break the bones and the marrow remains in the words. There is nothing that is not creative in this heart. Bows. ~Anna

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18 years 1 month ago

With Friends Like You.

Anna With Friends like You, and your thoughts poems, and views, The magic you inspire, has helped me greatly, Thank you so kindly, Very Kindest regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

18 years 1 month ago

Anam Cara ~ Gaelic for

Anam Cara ~ Gaelic for Friend of Your Soul. We have chosen to be such friends, long before we met, Peter. "Upon your rock, I will build my Church." We're all living temples. Love, Anna http://www.doyletics.com/arj/acrvw.htm

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18 years 1 month ago

Thanks Again

I will, and have saved the link, i've looked quickly but so much more to read, Thanks again.......I somewhat glow red.....:) Take care Anna......peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

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18 years 1 month ago

My

Condolences to you Peter on the journey to peace of your father-in-law, may I please say i like the way you have structured this poem, some of the lines are hard and clinical some are beautiful and soft, and also comes in some narrative written prose like giving interesting variety-Forgive that i have gone on too much about myself please, also there is no need to reply to this-My regards to you Peter-

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18 years 1 month ago

Thanks Pink

Please don't apologise, I am just glad that you have seen the difference's within the poem, thanks so much for your thoughts and views.... Take Care.....Best regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

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leonard daranjo

18 years 1 month ago

Thank you Peter

for your response and my condolence to you and your family. I sincerely hope your father in law rests in piece. Warmest regards ... Leonard

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18 years 1 month ago

Hi Leonard

Thank you.......Kindly Kindest Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

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18 years 1 month ago

Thank you

extremely much so for a reply Peter to thank, it is more than i deserve-I hope very much to be reading more of your poems in the future when you are more ready to write, i am still going to go on about myself now( BUT PLEASE DO NOT REPLY THIS TIME, YOU HAVE TOO MUCH TO DO AND THINK ABOUT AT THIS MOMENT), i am now going to stop writing for the time being and try to think how i should write more clearly without being too ordinary and plain, i hope to achieve this-If i stop writing altogether not a good idea as my mind shall degenerate-

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