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Michael Landau
Jun 05, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Electrical Storm

The sound and furyTears through meThe flashThe crashThe tetany Each new soundFills me with painEach new boomDrives me insane My muscles spasmFrom toe to hipEach new soundStrikes like a whip This electrical stormMakes me wish I were deadBut, it's nothing comparedTo the storm in my head When will it stop?When will it cease?I lie and waitAnd pray for peace

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poewriter58

17 years 11 months ago

Michael

very strongly written. You've made your reader feel your pain. I will never profess to "Know" how one feels unless I have been there. But I can empathizes Chrystalie
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weirdelf

17 years 8 months ago

I know this,

perhaps not in the same way as you, but I know the feelings and the physiology. tetany is an excellent word here. A powerful, concise and beautifully written poem. cheers, Jess