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The Sword and the Rose Part 1

The Sword and The Rose
Part I: The Sword of Fate


A warrior strong, hair worn long
Arms mighty as an oak
A fighting man, sword in hand
Of his prowess is oft spoke

With mighty sword, once felled a horde
Many were those that died
'Neath flashing blade in quiet glade
Where winds of sorrow sighed

Sword shining bright, solidified light
Agleam in morning sun
With whistling sound, blood-soaked ground
Alive was left but one

With comely wench in lusty clinch
His manly needs were great
Three or four and sometimes more
His baser needs he'd sate

One fateful day there came his way
Heavy purse filled with gold
From noble born, tired and worn
Bod' shaking from the cold

A lady fair, of flaming hair
With lips of ruby red
Must ride this day and hide away
Or else she will be dead

Forty coins gold would he then hold
The price to save the maid
In all the land was no man
Could stand against his blade

With gold-filled purse, foul danger lurked
Death hid behind each stone
No safety found, road or town
They rode just two alone

Two homespun cloaks, patches didst invoke
Visage of meager means
Beneath star light late one night
Didst passion take to wing

A warrior strong, a maiden's song
In each other were they lost
Forbidden tryst, lives didst twist
And dear would be the cost

end part one...
— Rett, Jun 01, 2008

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Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: Dickenson, Longfellow

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RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years ago

How epic

swept away in the tale you spun! Nicely written, Rett. Strong lines with great choice of words to evoke your images. I think you've done quite well here! Best, Ronda
Rett

Rett

18 years ago

How Epic

Thank you Rhonda. I appreciate it. I like to try my hand at a little of everything and enjoy writing. I am pleased you like it. Rett
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rider68

18 years ago

There's Magic In Your Words

This is such an enchanted read, a fable written with a golden quill sir, if you could be so kind as to where i may be able to purchase, To critique what.....awaiting the second Instalment Rett yet again.......well done Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
Rett

Rett

18 years ago

There's Magic in Your Words

Thank you very much Peter. I love to write. As for purchasing I would love to sell but somehow it just doesn't suit my nature. I would be happy to e-mail it to you for no more than a thanks. *G* Just let me know. Rett
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poewriter58

18 years ago

Gene

tiny suggestion what if you added times after oft=oft times spoke wow I am at a total loss for words here. What a wonderful way you have with words. Onto part two then Chrys
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Hi Rett

Read part three simply beautiful, now part 1 ditto, on to part two
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

Why did I think of Fritz Lieber, sans humour?

Have you read The Sword and Sorcery series? I recommend them. Fafhrd and the Grey Mouser. A hoot. This is much more powerful of course. A poweful write. I love to see unabashed macho writing, without pandering to political correctness. (Although, as you know, I believe political correctnes is a pwerful force for social change) Bravo, warrior. cheers, Jess
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Jess

I have read part of that, I love Fafhrd and the Grey Mouser. I am also a fan of C.J. Chereh's Four Lords of the Diamond. At last count my SF and Fantasy collection paperback and hardback came to over 1200 books. *L* I have trouble trading them, just can't bring myself to. I plan to finish out a lot of them. Thank you for reading although Fritz Leiber I'm not. He has some great stuff.. Later I will have to repost the other two in the series. Take care Jess. Rett ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Some call me lazy, I prefer Energy Conservationist~~~~~~~~~~~~~ That's P.C. speak by the way.