two fledglings (haiku)

I must say, a bit laughingly (sorry), that something ominous was not intended. The intention rather was to paint a peaceful scene---one quite relaxing, in fact. The shadow spoken of fell away from the fledgling robin him-/herself. There was no danger present. Primal as in early, first, pristine. Dawn's primal shadow as in shadow, in this case the fledgling robin's, made by/at sun's first light. Yours, Chuck PS: Glad I could clear this up. An anticipation of your personal reaction had not occurred to me.

conform the second part above to the following change (which alteration so far the original posting has refused to accept): fledgling cardinal hunkers on back patio, takes spring morn’s sunshine Ruefully wishing it would cooperate ... when of course it doesn't, Chuck