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Just one little tiny thing that made me go eeek! Can we write out 'and' instead of using &, or does the symbol have a sort of significance? Really like the 'bop bidi didi' line, as it got a nice smile out of me. Good job! ~Jess K. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "Political Correctness is a doctrine, fostered by a delusional, illogical, liberal minority and rabidly promoted by an unscrupulous mainstream media, which holds forth the proposition that it is entirely possible to pick up a turd by the clean end."

love this poem. its beautiful

It is good to see something from you one small question I'm not sure what does stiltskin hair Chrys

Lol not a problem meaning who Rumpelstiltskin? Chrys

Great thought and imagination, Loved the humour,.......... clever Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

Every line I thought to be eloquent except: The Bop bidi maybee just me? Anyway I liked this a lot

Eloquently written using excellent imagery. Really very beautiful. Two things that stand out to me, and I hesitate to point them out only because I know they aren't important to many authors with their own styles. Still, here they are: "tattle tailing" - I think you are referring to the term "tattle tale" - "tailing" brings a bit of a different image to mind! "Bare laying there" - "lay" is a verb used with an object, as in to lay something down ... where "lying" is a verb used without an object, as in to be in a recumbant position, "lying there." This is a common cause of confusion for many people (even me)...but you can see how it changes the line. Not sure if any of this helps, but I love the poem all the same. Best, Ronda

is cool-

I love this poem, which is saying something -- I'm very particular in my taste. It flows nicely, and painted a vivid picture in my head. I actually found myself mouthing the words. Fabulous.