Vibrations

You are absolutely right. Sorry, I haven't noticed that there are 6 syllables in the last stanza, and in this one I have not respected the 5-7-5 classical rule. I can not change it because this is the way I wanted to be like. Cheers and thank you!

Hope that now is better - no more haiku. Thanks for your kind words!

Hi Chrys. What I wanted to point with this poem is just a surrealist stance and the noisy steps are those of a shadow that is present during our lives. Hiding = I meant to show shadow’s movement with the direction of light. This is a little bit of surrealism and a little bit of optical physics. I don know if I will expand it because I didn’t want to express too much, to be annoying for the readers; it just express few thoughts under a surrealist shape. Cheers and thank you for your words. Marius

Chrys, I do not want to disappoint you but I choose to let the poem the way it is because I am sure that if I will try to expand it will loose his significance. And, as Alobar said, I will let it the way it is because the simple fact that makes the readers to imagine different shapes for this poem makes them to think or to remember different memories. Alobar, you are right about and is what I wanted to say. I will let it like that because is more mysterious than if I'll continue it's idea. Thank you for the support and kind words. Thank you both for the support and I appreciate your advices. Sincerely, Marius!

Well Jess, I - as a physicist and also as a poet, like to combine both in one, to create not just poetry but a sculpted one in the body of science. I want to be something else. Thank you! Marius