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Kailashana
Kailashana
May 24, 2008 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Tough As Nails

Barb's dad said I was as
"tough as nails".
How droll!  How ironic!
I should laugh, instead
I cough up a whole pack
of Niz's beedies
from my lungs or
between my legs..
don't know which
don't much care

clear the air...

perhaps, upon reflection,
I am shedding my "soft woman's skin",
once burnished with Buddha's gold,

it had to happen.

I no longer suffer fools
under any mystical ignorance tree..

Rainbow-serpent-skinned
ecstasy binds me
with nothing to affirm
and nothing more to deny.





— Kailashana, May 24, 2008
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RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 1 month ago

Tough As Nails

There are varying aspects within this piece; places where it genuinely catches my attention and others where I wander off in the obscurity of it, no matter how many times I read. I wonder if it is a "coming-of-age" tale, an epiphany, or a cataclysm ... there is definitely a metamorphosis occuring. While the images are evocative, as an author, I would ask myself if my meaning wasn't being lost in the ambiguity of the words. Best, Ronda
Kailashana

Kailashana

18 years 1 month ago

Well, there ya go… the

Well, there ya go... the author *is* lost in her own ambiguity... go figure! Different symbols mean different things to different authors, however, hence the ambiguity? Thank for reading & comment. Best also Rhonda, ~Anna
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 1 month ago

Don't think of it as criticism

Consider it....um.....constructive guidance? lol I hate the word criticism, especially when it comes to looking at someone else's work. I'm not perfect, so who am I to criticize? But if it's considered a constructive suggestion, I can fool myself into believing I just "might" have the ability to offer it. I do enjoy reading your work - and the banter is fun, too! ;) Hugs back, Ronda
Kailashana

Kailashana

18 years 1 month ago

Likewise… This really is a

Likewise... This really is a very good poetry site... must be the kindness of its natives...does anyone vote anyone off the island here? Have a great week Ronda, all (I know there's a silent lurker or two.;-) Anna
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

I quit smoking over 30 years

I quit smoking over 30 years ago, cold turkey WHILE my x still smoked and had a carton on top of the refrigeration. That was an accomplishment in wills. However, weirdly when this cosmic explosion, kundalini ascending thing happened, the taste of beedies, not cigarettes (and I have no idea what that really tastes like) came up and then I read of Nisargadatta. Recently the same taste is resurfacing. And something is happening. Aren't you glad you asked? I love your church, kinda love you too. ;-) ~A

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