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Hated

Senryu: 5|7|5 Hated

 

Wretched, wicked heart

No one should want, as a friend

Rip it from her chest

 

Kindness ran away

From her lonely thirsty heart

Trying to feel adore

 

Blinded by the light

Compassion slips through her hands

Trying to show love


— Barbara Writes, May 23, 2008

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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Marius Surleac

Marius Surleac

18 years ago

nice senryu

Great imagery shaped in a 3 part classical senryu, a little bit plastic and a short noise perfectly provoked by the alliteration from the first stanza. Cheers! Marius