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whitetea
whitetea
May 21, 2008 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

"thank you for your perceptions"

You swing in quick enough,
with white-out bottles and dirty elbows
in the places you couldn't
plant the words.

I don't have your
 tree lined streets ready,
or the way that points to Easy.

And no one here
sells lemonade.
— whitetea, May 21, 2008

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Chrystos, Mark Strand, Adrienne Rich, Naomi Shihab Nye, Rachel M. Simon, Donald Justice, Mary Oliver, Nikki Giovanni, Alice Walker, Bukowski, Mary Lambert

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barbsdad2003

18 years 2 months ago

Brightly retortful ...

and nicely done. Cogent, briefly sarcastic. Lean. Spare with words. The point's made---and made well. "You swing in quick enough ... in the places you couldn’t plant the words." As if to say, "So there! Take that! Hah!" Thanx again, Appreciative Chuck PS: Speaking, I think, of critics ... and as to their motivations: "They have a right to censure, that have a heart to help: the rest is cruelty, not justice." ---William Penn
whitetea

whitetea

18 years 1 month ago

thank you!

Wonderful quote, Good old Will. The more I read the quote, the more dimensions it has. Ah, theres Buster again! How is he?
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rider68

18 years 1 month ago

And There shines the Brilliance

And There shines the Brilliance, Hidden behind tree lined streets, Very Clever;......I too love the quote, Kindest Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
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Vulgar Peregrine

18 years 1 month ago

wow! this on’s going to be

wow! this on's going to be tacked to the wall along with the Penn quote

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