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themoonman
themoonman
May 18, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Catching Phrases

Subversive phrases
mock the wrongs we've done.
Mirrored antiquities
take away any fun.

Have your relics been wasted?
Are your dust bunnies there?
 too tired and complaisant
to comprehend or really care.

Uncontrollable underlying messages,
untimely thoughts,
your worlds own rage...
all that shit that don't mean anything
but remembered anyway.

Subversion in my fences.
Are people ever real?
I won't stand for the beating.
I need a better deal.

I'm gonna cock my mind for the sanity
that people think is theirs,
be myself... not an easy task for me,
and catch some phrases on the way.
— themoonman, May 18, 2008

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

18 years ago

Rich

Loved it! Couple corrections, possibly? complaisant = eager to please. Did you mean complacent? "Are people ever real?" Ever? or Even? "Are people even real?" is an interesting question. Still and all, I really liked this one. :~) ~Jess ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Last night I lay in bed looking up at the stars in the sky and I thought to myself, where the hell is the ceiling??"
themoonman

themoonman

18 years ago

Hi Lynn..

thanks for stopping in and reading and commenting... complaisant and complacent actually mean the same thing.. trying to please everyone else is where I was going with it.. are people even real... I like that better.. thanks again... Richard
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barbsdad2003

18 years ago

Some existential questions ...

nicely posed here. I like your piece ... and, of course, its subject matter. Your "Are people ever real?" and "I’m gonna cock my mind for the sanity that people think is theirs" led me on an I think fruitful search, where I turned up: "It would be better for men To be few and live far apart, where none could infect another; then slowly the sanity of field and mountain And the cold ocean and glittering stars might enter their minds." ---Jeffers I'm hopeful the quote resonates at least somewhat with your thinking. Thanx, Chuck
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Cajue

18 years ago

I like it...

I'm not sure if you care or not, but I feel like the rhythm breaks down in the third stanza. The first two paragraphs are lovely. I like the overall message of the poem.