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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
May 15, 2008 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

She Has Been Contained

She Has Been Contained   A mother I am, love my kids  A wife I am, unappreciated No life to call my own Lost   The woman in me has been lost Trapped inside, the woman, I have become Fighting for release Entrap  

In dense smoke, I am suffocating
from the controlling

That is slowly taking my life Dying   Tears are just rain shower You wait for its ending To continue this weary path Crying   Love you dangle before me Like steak to a starving dog That cannot reach Mercy
— Barbara Writes, May 15, 2008

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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DarkinAZ

18 years 2 months ago

This is sad

I like this, however it is quite sad. Title option : I just kept thinking "contained" Love it, Mark
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years 2 months ago

Thanks Mark

Smiles:) Barbara Appreciate your comment. Is where I am right know. Thanks for title suggestion.
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

Barbara

The lines that stand out the most for me are: Love you dangle before me Like steak to a starving dog But the whole poem is excellent and gets your message across. I like Mark's title suggestion, too. Always, Cat
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years 2 months ago

Thanks Cat

Smiles:) Barbara I think his is good i am considering it. Had one in mind, but forgot it when writing. Chewing on the title.

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