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struck me forcibly in this very fine poem. Was that your intention? If so it works wonderfully well....if not it worked wonderfully well for me, giving another depth to this poem. Feel enriched by reading it....thanks. Pleides

just right. I reread to follow more carefully. A brilliant piece tracing dryness through to knowing future of more of the same. I'm not a fan, frankly, of free verse. But ... but for this I make exception. I rarely vote ... and am way too stingy with votes of 5, but here goes ... Thanx, Chuck PS: As an acknowledgment of your whitetea handle: I've become an inveterate drinker of tea, preferring a combination of 2/3 white and 1/3 green. Goes good with my diabetes. (Though I must say, and that laughingly, that I hate the taste of tea. But I'll imbibe whatever helps my health. No matter the taste. Or smell. Or even what others may think---of it or me.)

Hi and Hello I really enjoyed reading...and loved the arrangement - different worked very well, Very Best Regards 5/5 from me...... Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

I felt the section speaking of waiting in line - counting the backs of heads really hit me. I like how you use several situations to show us how you feel- the mundane, monotony and disconnect of not ever really "connecting" - it doesn't appear a choice - it is almost as if you feel insignificant - taken for granted - not really seen. I think in today's society that is a common problem - we avoid eye contact, rarely talk to neighbors, stand inches apart without speaking, and feel like outsiders of a world we are supposedly a part of- but aren't...not really. This was refreshing - in that it stands out as having a unique voice, and a great deal of deep thought. I'm not sure about the "dust in the water"- that particular image didn't really work for me, but others may feel differently - Also, the word "like" is a bit overused, in my opinion. Overall, I really enjoyed this work - you are very talented. Sincerely, Amara