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The Sweetest War
and with a single, misfired,
Unthinking word,
The pyres are lit,
The troops are roused
And the horns are blown.
Then onto the plains,
with standards high,
Our armies march.
The beat of our war drums
Ring out across the hills,
Vibrations tearing
Destroying the landscape.
Across those shattered fields
Our Warriors drop,
Into the deepest,
Darkest valley,
Where the battle truly begins.
They grapple and flail,
Back and forth,
Wrestling for position;
The “one up”, the “coup de grace”!
Fiercer now
and with unrelenting malice we continue,
The blood of our hearts spilling,
Drenching,
Blinding our sight.
As we reach our peak,
The sky gives way,
Crumbling apart.
Then the salt rain flows,
Our armies retreat,
Washing the blood,
Redeeming our hearts,
and with an embrace we fall back.
Critiques
weirdelf
18 years 2 months ago
This is weird shit, man
Kieran Nelson
18 years 2 months ago
It was inspired a bit by
rider68
18 years 2 months ago
Very Creative
Candlewitch
18 years 2 months ago
Wow… breath stopping
Janice Pearce
18 years ago
The Sweetest War
DarkinAZ
18 years ago
Long time no see,
infinite_dwarf
18 years ago
Kieran
orgami
18 years ago
battle poem epic
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