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Marius Surleac
Marius Surleac
May 12, 2008 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Facts

Facts

I've opened the window to spot the sunrise
and I saw you
I've bent myself to feel the nature
and I discerned your silhouette
Then I've opened the door to look for my joy
and I found you
I've travelled the whole world
and I discovered you
Unexpectedly I've opened my eyes
and I saw myself

In that split second I started to cry!!!
— Marius Surleac, May 12, 2008

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Region, Country: Romania, ROU

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infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

18 years 2 months ago

Almost...

Like a dream that you've just woken up from. A little expansion perhaps? ~Lynn (Jess K.) ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Last night I lay in bed looking up at the stars in the sky and I thought to myself, where the hell is the ceiling??"
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Unwavering

18 years 1 month ago

Facts

This poem was beautiful. Your choice of words were perfect. A great poem is when the reader can actually picture themselves inside the words. I opened my eyes and saw myself also. Very well written. Exalt to you!
Marius Surleac

Marius Surleac

18 years 1 month ago

thank you!

Thank you very much, I appreciate your kind comment and I am glad that my poem gave you these happy feelings. All the best, Marius
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years ago

mmm, very interesting...

ever read Jung? anima/animus. There is a slight ambiguity, that moment of recognition, is it narcissism or anima reflecting what you need? Don't explain, the poem doesn't need it, just my rumbling ruminations. cheers, Jess

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