A Heartbeat Is Not Free

is very interesting. It almost seemed to me that it was about donating your organs on death? Could be utterly wrong here, if so please excuse. I found the last four lines very profound and powerful, and if I may say so hope people who read this will think as I have about the message it sends. Thanks for posting it. Pleides

James one small correction He said sacrifice had given him or He said sacrifice gave him your poem touches a spot somewhere deep in the emotions true there are many ways a heart may be given medically as a donation but anytime a person puts forth a part of them self they are giving their heart Chrys

sacrifice is such an abusable concept. The soldier who dives on a grenade to save his mates? Laudable sacrifice. Some messiah for spiritual reasons? Don't buy it. Give an organ to save someone? +1 Be a martyr? Do it somewhere else. Love is not chained to loss. Your thoughts are provoking to me but I do not dismiss them. A good poem cheers, Jess

you walked us through the emotions of sacrifice very well

Hi James A Pandora’s Box of thoughts Mixed concept's and emotions, very cleverly written, Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

One suggestion: the line "he disclosed no face or name" just doesn't sit right. What about "did he disclose a face or name" or "had he disclosed a face or name" I think either of those two would work a little better. Otherwise, good write! I like the title, as not only is it quite fitting, but it also almost prepares the reader for a solid message. ~Lynn (Jess K.) ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Last night I lay in bed looking up at the stars in the sky and I thought to myself, where the hell is the ceiling??"

that what I'm feeling in this piece good write. the message image is profound. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara