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Kailashana
Kailashana
May 07, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Water




rain drop
clings to leaf

we live
and die

before
the raindrop
falls

like transient Lovers
unwilling to kiss
the ocean goodbye.




 
— Kailashana, May 07, 2008

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drachm

18 years 1 month ago

Water

Of the four elements why is water the most popular? Why is love so transient? The poem is very simple but it has a certain charm to it.
Kailashana

Kailashana

18 years 1 month ago

Actually, I am more inclined

Actually, I am more inclined to us fire as an imagery. However, I am a Virgo, mercurial and you never know what I churn up ;-) ~a thanks for reading d.
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Orphani

16 years 4 months ago

In these seemingly simple

In these seemingly simple lines you balance lifes mortality with your own inner longing. I found this to be among your most revealing of poems. Everything I love about poetry is contained in these few lines. It's exquisitely beautiful and delicate like a butterfly Its purety is crystol like. It is to be adored like you. B