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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
May 06, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Mountain View

Mountain View

I stand atop of this mountain
watching my troubles descend
to the bottom of the sea

I see through deep waters watching
the worries of my life
fall beneath ocean reef

I delight in the feeding frenzy
as the corals eat away
my entire dilemma   

I look to the heavens
with loud screams
singing, yes free at last


— Barbara Writes, May 06, 2008

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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DarkinAZ

18 years 1 month ago

I especially

Like the ending. Sincerely, Mark
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

Mark

Smiles:) Barbara Thanks, your comment is refreshing. Reading your ocean poem awaken this piece in me. This piece fits my present mood, which is down most of the time, personal problems everybody has them. Keep writing those inspiring pieces.
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DarkinAZ

18 years 1 month ago

Wow,

I inspired? Thank you so much. Keep your chin up. Sincerely, Mark
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MeanderS

18 years 1 month ago

phoenix

i felt like a free free bird...in the freer skies...all of a sudden it seemed as if the sea got drowned in ur little heart an' the mountain descended like a feather from ur tiny brain...an' the sea an' the mountain...both bowed low before you...as the corals brightly shone in the eyes... mighty uplifting...i must say Barbara... thanku so much al the v.best sincerest wishes.
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

Thanks

Smiles:) Barbara Thanks you are so encouraging. you made feel better with your heartwarming comment Thanks again all the very best for you too.
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years 1 month ago

Barb

Beautifully written, disagree with Mark this one is so strong, yet the last three take away from this beautiful piece! Great Write Barb!
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barbsdad2003

18 years 1 month ago

A good project, methinks, for ...

an up-and-coming physicist: Question - Do troubles respond to gravity? And if so, does presence on a mountaintop encourage troubles to descend farther, deeper, than they might otherwise? Fortunately, at least a couple of benefits do arise from troubles, one being that they allow room for sharp contrast when happy times chance upon/deign to visit us. I like the sense of relief you express at watching your troubles from the top of the world. A wonderful perspective it is there. And living in no-legs tabletop (read monotonous) southeast Michigan, I so cherish/miss the mountains of my birthplace elsewhere ... which I cannot see, which troubles me (at times too greatly), from where I am. Alas! I must travel elsewhere to experience them. Thanx, Chuck
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

Thanks Chuck

Smiles:) Barbara Troubles respond to gravity and mountain top encouraging troubles to descend deeper? I do think suicide more likely. Better trouble descend that bodies. Family think I simply crazy. Thanks for commenting your viewpoint is appreciated. Physicist, great field to be working in.
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rider68

18 years 1 month ago

A Beautiful Prospective

Hi Barbara I must agree with Mark, that reflection from above and below, works really well for me, what sits awkwardly for me is......, "yes free at last" Just a suggestion I look to the heavens with loud screams singing, as my chains have now broken free, I loved it all the same, Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~