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Alobar
May 09, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Provider

Let me hold your burden for you

Unflex your arms

Make them smooth
and feminine again

Let me provide you grace

Let me hold your burden for you,
Let me think
I’m providing
you grace,
shouldering for you
the world itself

This weight
This weight you hold above your head:
In belief, you have passed it to me
and I am your man,
your Atlas

In truth though
you are the great one,
for you provide

You are the provider

I am merely the man

The man who holds your burden for you,
and believes
he provides you grace.

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poewriter58

18 years ago

Alobar

What Happened ????????? this is not your better writings I see where you were going with this but you derailed lol particularly the second stanza try re reading and perhaps reworking it I'll be watching for it Chrys
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Alobar

17 years 12 months ago

And here we see why one

And here we see why one should not write a poem on their lunch break--with voices all around them talking about last night's Survivor and tomorrow night's date--then immediately post it without first letting it sit and age, reading it over at home and then deciding if it is ready to undergo serious scrutiny. This one was not. It may reappear later, or I may just leave it as a reminder to myself of this very fact. The theme I'm going at I still like, and I still want to explore, just don't feel up to it right now. On to something else.... Thank you for your honesty. Alobar (Just my two cents, spend them on gum if you wish.)