I walk on

Forward thinking
backward talk
silent musing
on a lonely walk
contradictions
lead the way
wreaking havoc
on this lovely day
small ironies overfill
the cracks in the street
and shattered ego's
crunch beneath my feet
smug arrogance
pollutes
my once pure air
and there's nothing in sight
to conflate or to share
and obstacles
drift and sway
in the wind
waiting to fall
on the path I intend
and ,yet,I walk on
head held high
for blessings from heaven
will rain from the sky.

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Region, Country: New York, USA

Comments

DarkinAZ

18 years ago

Good one!

I like this, I too am waiting for those sheets of heavenly rain and the blessings they contain. Sincerely, Mark

Calliope

18 years ago

Thank you

I believe those sheets will be coming soon... Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.

infinite_dwarf

18 years ago

Calliope

For some reason, I really liked the first two lines. Good write, but everything seems a little crowded.... maybe break things up a little? ~Lynn (Jess K.) ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "If guns kill people, then I can blame mis-spelled words on my pencil.." - Larry the Cable Guy ~ "Driver carries less than $20 in remorse..."

Calliope

18 years ago

thanks Lynn,

i actually had it written out broken up,but then changed it when posting,lol,oh well i'll fix it later, Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.

LadyTheresa

56 years 4 months ago

Lacy

This is quite beautiful...Great work on this one my dear... Smiles, Theresa

professor

17 years 11 months ago

This is a beautiful poem Lacy

although i think you could make the imagery work even more powerfully for you. First off i would consider changing "lovely" for something more poignant. Then perhaps you might think about seeing the obstacles falling down into your path in the growing breeze as the first raindrops in an approaching storm. Then finally the blessings of heaven you refer to are also raindrops falling from the sky...i.e. both obstacles and positives come from the same skywards direction. Your image actually reminded me of "pennies from heaven". Anyway, just some thoughts for you. Also i think the passage below felt as if it was intending "conflate and share the obstacles..." so perhaps it should run as below. and there’s nothing in sight to conflate or to share the obstacles that drift and sway Keith

cricket

17 years 10 months ago

I walk on

What a fitting title for this write Lacy,, The imagery is powerful as written.. I like the thought of being able to walk on with all the obstacles that may fall in your path... the end gives way to positive thoughts as you hold your head high ..knowing that you will be blessed.. indeed gives imagery of pennies from heaven .. a write in which I can relate and so a favorite.Bravo Lacy.. BrownEyesBlue