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Janice Pearce
Janice Pearce
May 04, 2008 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

2nd Haiku

pirate of words

wakes to the vagabond sun

a barefoot parrot
— Janice Pearce, May 04, 2008

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poewriter58

18 years 2 months ago

Janice

If you were going for a 5/7/5 pattern the first lines misses by one yup a parrot is a pirate of words but barefoot lol the only difference between a Haiku and Senryu is one applies to people the other to nature Chrys
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years 1 month ago

Chrys

Don't know how I missed your comment[ don't know what happened] Thank you for your kind words wasn't going for the strict 5,7,5 I tend to write breaking the rules in haiku Thanks again!
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prayersbyPatty

18 years 1 month ago

I like this one

Vagabond parrot kinda reminds me of a ocean beach right after the tide goes out and the parrot, barefoot searching for something, perhaps a barefoot vagabond
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years 1 month ago

Hi Patty

You twisted it around and made it funny, nice re-wording! Made me laugh~

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