Spring's Witness (Haiku)

Thank goodness for that, it's been a long Winter! For a first haiku, it is pretty good :) Always, Cat

stop that right now your subject matter is not boring and this is a perfect Haiku Chrys

Spring is a much welcomed event, and a great topic to write on. Much respect on the haiku, Richard... I don't even know where to begin on those things - lol. ~Lynn (Jess K.) ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Bush is listening.... use big words!" ~ "Your inferiority complex is better than mine..."

Beautiful picture of Spring - nothing boring about that - it is rejuvination and promise - awaking and birth. Amara

I liked the first line, a disdain for the ugliness at fall's end, just before winter blankets and flattens you. Personally, Fall is my favourite season, but only the first half or so, then it all gets dirty and cold; that blanket of death remains as spring arrives, and, as you say, becomes vigorous. Life renewed. Fine Haiku. Alobar (Just my two cents, spend them on gum if you wish.)

That's your first haiku? nice dude. As it is fun to keep the form of the traditional Japanese (17 syllables, as you know) I have found it quite liberating to throw the form out the window as many American(or Western rather), haikuists have done. As a student of Eastern language, religion and poetry, I have to agree with Kerouac when he says that '...Western languages cannot adapt themselves to the fluid syllabillic Japanese.' That being said, I still love writing in 5/7/5. Well done. Peace.

Sublime is what I think of this. An awesome picture capturing the essence of life. Take care