Vocal Expression of Pain (20)

I think that this poem is great. The words seem t jump out and create a whirl of poetic language that spirals upwards before crashing around eaving you with a sense of beautiful satisfaction

That grunt refrain keeps on earthing it after the poetic rants. It's really disturbing though. Those grunts could be occurring during sex or while digging a grave, puncturing the stream of consciousness. Man, I'm glad you came to this site, look forward to more and to hearing your work live, you got a solid performance quality in both those I've read. cheers, Jess

Whoa your really got into that goat character cool poem man.Far out Don't get it confuzed I'ma fuze that refuze to be used for Destruction C4 not even a component used I'll amplify my Altitude I'm so high I can't see if you have an Attitude Chill I ain't the troll under the bridge It's the R.O.L.W.R.I.G.H.T ain't easy to spell Oh well it's easier too read got no trick up my sleeve But I'ma magician so I'ma make like a leaf and breeze With the wind I got something else to do I'll excuse Myself cause wisdom only reaches the undeaf Can you hear that 1! 2! 3! from the ref I was close to retirement so just use less aggression Just a suggestion Keep up the good work Goat Guy Don't erupt a volcano just a message. BOOM!

Liam Such a mind trip, enticing yet disturbing, and yet I find myself baiting for more, Love to known were you were, at what place, state, frame of mind, please expand, Truly Fantastic, Mind Evoking, Brilliant Read…… Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

shes pressed on the sky at 2:55PM flying for her babies in that nettle of a tree Hey there! love your works you write very well O