Barbara Writes

May 01, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Exhale The Ocean

Exhale the Ocean

Your infinite cerulean waters
Took my breathe away, and
Your sandy beaches tranquil my feet
And tickled my toes

The night air's soothing winds
Embraced my cool skin as I
Watched the waters meet the heavens
Touching the starry skies shining bright

With my arms extended, I inhale the ocean
Under the twilight along the water's edge
Closing my eyes, I consider
The world I hate, its wicked games
To make me stagger

Into the ripple my thoughts released
Exhale the ocean

— Barbara Writes, May 01, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

Critiques

poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

Barbara

I do like this one I can see a person standing with outstretched arms facing the ocean last stanza may I suggest these lines the world I hate with it's wicked games light change of wording up to you anything to do with the ocean rates high in my book love that title! very eye catching Chrys

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

Chrys

Smiles:) Barbara Thanks for you comment and suggestion. will reconsider wording

DarkinAZ

18 years 1 month ago

Sounds,

Like a wonderful way to refresh ones self, while expelling the worry's of the day. I thought this was refreshing, Mark

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

Mark

Smiles:) Barbara Thanks, glad you see it that way. So much to stress about. Writing it was refreshing for me.

Janice Pearce

18 years 1 month ago

Barb

Exhale The Ocean Barb, you brought me right to the water's edge We stumble and fall Release all thoughts to the ripple Exhale the ocean beautiful~

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

Janice

Smiles:) Barbara Thanks for your wonderful comment

drachm

18 years 1 month ago

The Ocean

The Ocean is such a wonderful thing---just seeing it can change your mood! Drachm

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

Drachm

Smiles:) Barbara Thank for your comment. Relaxing from taking my final exams. Just getting to checking my email. wonderful ocean poem

whitetea

18 years ago

Have you read this to

Have you read this to anyone? It seems it would be a good one to be read aloud.

Barbara Writes

18 years ago

Thanks

Smiles:) Barbara Haven't read it to anyone yet, but will thanks for suggesting. I read some of my poems, didn't think about this one.

Ink Dragon

17 years 3 months ago

Barbara,

the title alone is genius! Very imaginative and wonderful imagery in the whole piece. One tiny suggestion: l.5: the night air-> the night air´s? What do you think? Yours, ~Nina

Barbara Writes

17 years 3 months ago

Nina

when I originally wrote this I was depress about something or another and needed a channel to released the negatives force in me. Since I couldn't get to the beach i put myself there in this poem and release my anger to ripple. Thanks glad you like the title the poem. I made the change. appreciate the suggestion ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara