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My Reflections

I saw my reflection in the mirror at the beginning of the day,
and the "hope" in my eyes was so very pronounced
because I yearned for things unseen.
And the brilliance of the day was even brighter,
from the light reflected from the shards of possibilities.

So brilliant were these rays,
that they had embarrassed the Sun,
to where the mercury in all of the thermometers
did blush, out of the sincerest respect.

My reflection, later in the day by a beautiful lake,
introduced me to a different view of myself.
One born from weariness of the journey and it's elements,
As gravity seemed to pull harder, surprise showed in my eyes.
For the clouds had dimmed the brightness,

and were trying to posess the day.
But, the temporary gloom refreshed me,
and...after glancing into the water, once again
"relaxed", is what the spirit of my soul displayed.

Finally, I saw my reflection in two tears shed from your eyes.
And, as the Moon collects the keys to the day,
and prepares to lock up shop for the Sun,
I know...that that's the reflected image that matters most of all.
For one eye shed a tear out of sorrow...

..and I'm sorry for you ever having had a reason to cry at all.
But the other tear, the one shed from happiness and joy,
flattered my image, and reflected why your essensce shines so very bright.
For that's the tear you've never wiped away.



— docmaverick, Apr 25, 2008

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Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Xenia

18 years 1 month ago

nice

I liked it alot. Realy heart warming.
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pinksheep

18 years 1 month ago

I've

given it 5 anyway , not going to write anything ,as you have written so intrecately , magically and with insight into the human psyche , anything i write will look ludricrous ,i assure you-
docmaverick

docmaverick

18 years ago

Pinksheep...

..you're very forgiving, for I really struggled with this piece. Come to think of it, I've been struggling a lot, of late. Thanx 4 ur input, doc.
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pinksheep

18 years ago

I am going to try to help

Though i am not the best person to do this, in my extremely humble opinion this great piece of work needs editing-For example do you need to say that you see your reflection in a mirror?Just simply I saw my reflection at the beginning of the day-Surely for example again you do not need the AND beginning of the 4th line 1st stanza-you have, in my extremely humble opinion a mini gem here with some delicate cutting it could be set-Also i am a bugar for similes maybe you could introduce just one, i d'ont know, as i have seen good poetry, very good poetry with no similes- i can only give this advice because similes are about all i understand in writing-You have talent, you just need some nourishing from someone richer in writing than myself, all i have given you here is a packet of crisps and a fizzy drink, instead of a banana, peach and glass of iced water with freshly squeezed lime-Regards