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I Stand Alone

                                                         "I stand alone"
                                             were the words he had said....
                                                 A lonely schoolyard boy,
                                                   In his first days dread.

                                              He had spent all his recess
                                                    trying hard to pretend
                                           that in the midst of his sadness
                                                 He did not need a friend.

                                              Then....just when he figured
                                                 He knew not what to do.....
                                           ....A little girl broke the silence...
                                           "CAN I PLAY HERE WITH YOU?"

                                              The little boy became gleeful.
                                               She had brightened his day....
                                              He could reply with one laugh
                                            the sweet words,"YES,YOU MAY."

                                                So to close,if this awakens
                                              the small schoolchild in you,
                                              it is because you were aware.....
                                        that YOU ONCE STOOD ALONE TOO.
— JWwildcat2012, Apr 23, 2008

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Region, Country: Brownsville,KY USA

Favorite Poets: D. H Lawrence and Robert Frost

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poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

something is missing

Very simply written nothing wrong in that , it touchs something we all have experienced this is also good but there is something missing and I just cannot put my finger on it maybe breaking it into stanzas so that each point is emphasized Chrys
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Calliope

18 years 1 month ago

I agree

Chrys has a point.breaking the stanza's would make this more powerful.And maybe there is something missing but i can't figure it out either,try the stanza breaking see if it works for you,just an opinion.But good write none-the-less. Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
Frost Smith

Frost Smith

18 years 1 month ago

James Scott Webb...

welcome to the site Just the way I feel but I think the missingness is it is just observation based, nothing really to draw you in, no risk taken. I myself mostly write in "simple" forms, not very long, and mostly in language anyone can understand; but I challenge myself everytime to dig as deep as I can inside and pour that on to paper; I would love to see you write this from one of the childerns point of view. Hope this was helpful Frost
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lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Here,Here.

Bloody brilliant. I can assure you we all felt that way. You are good.Great title, beginning to end. lyz.