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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Apr 21, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Untold Power

Untold Power

Gentle spring showers
Strike of Lightning earth shakes
Pine tree split in half








— Barbara Writes, Apr 21, 2008

About This Poem

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

Barbara

was this to be a Haiku? if so the count is off If not If not with a bit of tweaking it could become the first stanz of a poem summer spring shower? is it summer shower or a spring shower or both? if both then perhaps something ,like The showers of spring will become those of summer whichever you meant this to be work on it because I see where it can go Chrys
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

thanks

Smiles:) Barbara Thanks for bringing this to my attention. It is not haiku. Will make the correction.
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 1 month ago

ummm this is difficult

if it was not intended as a haiku why conform to form? But (oh, I'm a big but bastard) if it's not a haiku it doesn't quite work. Needs the human element of haiku. Dig it as it stands, anyway. cheers, Jess
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

Appreciate your view

Smiles:) Barbara Though not intended as haiku. Thought might be different, as is my nature to throw things out there. Will make this haiku. Knowing me will do something else with it just to be different. Hope you comment in your usual blunt way letting me know if it works. But not too harsh, might cry.
Rett

Rett

17 years 10 months ago

Good

'Nuff said! Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 10 months ago

Thanks Jess

Smiles:) Barbara Forgiveness flows freely here. Glad you stop by. Your comment is very refreshing, always appreciated and welcome.
Mark

Mark

17 years 10 months ago

This is a great poem Barbara

I keep going back to the title and think hmmmm the power of lightning has been told many times or has it? I wonder what your perception of the title is? Mark
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 10 months ago

Thanks Mark

Smiles:) Barbara Appreciate you stopping by and commenting, happy you like it giving it high praise.
Mark

Mark

17 years 10 months ago

It struck me - me

As anger, Barbara; Violence Sadness to anger Strike out at anything close Distroy the beauty Wow, Barbara, you bring this to me after many visits here :) Congratulations on Evolution. (there is a thunder storm here now lol) Mark
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 10 months ago

Power force of nature

Smiles:) Barbara Thanks for reading and commenting, appreciate your take on it. different interpretations makes it a gem I think.
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 10 months ago

Barbara

Not to be nitpickey~ because this is a beautiful haiku, butis line two one sylable short? Nice piece here Barbara!
Mark

Mark

17 years 10 months ago

Hmm it's 2 where I come from but

there needs to be a standard yes? Webster says fire is one syllable. Funny thing it's one of those things I needed to learn too. We just keep on learning here lol Mark
Rett

Rett

17 years 10 months ago

*LOL*

mark, I have heard it pronounced fyrah in places and a lot of places down here pronounce it fahr which I catch myself doing at time instead of the correct fire. *LOL* Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 10 months ago

Thanks Mark, Rett, and Janice

Smiles:) Barbara I pronounce it as two syllable also, but it is one. Hope you like the change just as much. Appreciate the correction. and thanks again for the nice comments.