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Night venture - society’s crossroads

Night venture - society’s crossroads

I seek my lost desire
where dead men lost their bones,
and burns inside the fire
of limbo’s pleasures ghosts.

Where night hides on each piece of town
and moon shines in every hole filled with water,
from the tears of the old lady
that passed the sky in a hurry…
Where mist swallows her healthy nightingales,
up from the baffling windows.
Dogs score for their territory
where rats drag along their fat bellies
through the rubble and papers…
Pimps selling their walking flesh catch,
but only some silky steps threw on the alley
make the painting’s gesture be expressive!!!
Wind searches for obstacles
and mystery flows at the edge of my sight –
caught by the act of a chimera for the next day.
Nymphs whispering beyond the skinhead concrete trees,
faces digging old dirty teeth reflect my fovea –
then blood’s turbulent run aware my silhouette,
combined in a dull body –
tail of my feet…
A sterile mind game enters like snake
in the body of my matchless sensations.
My voice, my mouth’s prison, I can’t spit!!!
So I walk alone in a heritage screen,
build at the border of everyone’s nightmare
in a poignant scream.
My lungs got invaded by the streets’ foliage
and a cigarette gives them the hint
for the daily sepulchre –
we all sneak into it…

I seek, I walk and sleep,
I run, I hide and snatch
my feet, my furnished thoughts;
but then I die my tracks onto the corner,
sunk in the dark!

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Region, Country: Romania, ROU

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poewriter58

18 years ago

your poem

was somewhat difficult to read as it might do with some breaking into stanzas to make it easier on the eyes also the content was difficult to comprehend perhaps it is the language barrier however from the words and message that I was able to glean this could be a powerful poem Chrys
Marius Surleac

Marius Surleac

18 years ago

Chrys, answer

I don't know if is so hard to understood by I know what you meant with the breaking of the stanzas. I can not break them because I have written this poem with the next idea: it looks like that because is made of three parts (an introduction, a narration expended body and a final part as a conclusion). That's why it doesn't look better if I'll break the stanzas. The message is about the inner state in a wasted society, swiftly provoked in the middle part of the poem! Thank you very much for your comment and I appreciate it! Marius!
Marius Surleac

Marius Surleac

18 years ago

Thank you Cat!

When I wrote the poem I didn't thought to Bob Dylan's song, but is somewhat similar with the basic idea of Bob's song. For me is an honour that my poem reminded you of such an extraordinary singer and man as Bob Dylan. Thank you once again and you're always welcome! Marius
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years ago

This would be a great performance piece.

Dark and highly evocative, great imagery. But one piece of advice, my friend. One ! is always enough. Two!'s is redundant. 3 !'s is a sign of psychosis (only joking). Really if the words don't say it !!! won't either. and perhaps for sank into the dark!!! sunk in the dark! cheers, Jess
Marius Surleac

Marius Surleac

18 years ago

I see...

Yes, I know what you meant but I use three !!! because I want to be like expressing more, like "Pay attention" - something like that. But thank you again for your advice and I have paid attention to something that nobody said it before. Thank you so much! I'll keep that in mind because you're right! Cheers, Marius
Marius Surleac

Marius Surleac

18 years ago

thank you...

I haven't seen that. thank you very much for the advice...you were right. Cheers and thank for your kind comment! Marius