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Marius Surleac
Marius Surleac
Apr 17, 2008 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Haiku - snooze beneath landscapes

Haiku - snooze beneath landscapes

Look becoming wiped –
wind blows stardust from the sky
straight to the eyelash!
— Marius Surleac, Apr 17, 2008

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Region, Country: Romania, ROU

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purplemoondoll

18 years 3 months ago

Welcome to the site

Great structure and imagery. I like the wind blowing stardust - beautiful. I look forward to seeing more of your work. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
Marius Surleac

Marius Surleac

18 years 3 months ago

Thank you Kaz!

I appreciate your kind comment! Indeed we have to be positive inside our souls and mind to express the same feeling outside. Thank you again and I'm glad that you enjoyed my poem! Have a nice day! Marius
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Alobar

18 years 3 months ago

A poem of awe at the

A poem of awe at the night-sky's brilliance and incomprehensibility. Well done. The title seems a little less than the poem deserves, brings up more of a pastoral scene for me, than the infinite. But the poem is perfect Haiku. Alobar (Just my two cents, spend them on gum if you wish.)
Marius Surleac

Marius Surleac

18 years 3 months ago

thanks

Thank you so much for your kind comment. Cheers from Marius!
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years ago

what I love abut this is

that it satifies the requirements of haiku, philosophically, while lending a distinctly western viewpoint cheers, Jess

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