Glass Heart #5

I like the content and creativity. I like how you give three similar, yet different, scenarios: boat, spaceship, house. I also like how in each verse you include a human reference: human blood, poet blood, shattered heart. Each of these has nothing to do with the glass x of the verse, yet you tie it in well. For improving it (and this is merely my opinion) I would change just two things. In Verse 1 - Line: "Shark..." pluralize shark and whale, or make more of a singular reference. In Verse 1 - Line: "Starfish..." change to "a sleek shiny dolphin" -or- "sleek shiny dolphins". Just to keep grammatically sound. Aside from that, a beautiful piece of writing! I'd give 4-5 stars, but I can't vote yet. I think I will be able to when my account is approved.

Your poem gives me an impression of a helpless sentient body awash with the endless life experiences of a cruel, violent sea, its perception from the achieved detachment of transcendental space and finally the inescapable truth of a life on the reality of land where there is no hiding place for a wounded soul. Its a very deep trinity you have conjued here Anna and the more i read the further down and into the depths of a harmed and questioning soul it goes. My favourite part is definitely: "silent Meditation in the colour of daylight, pink with the medley of paper narcissus and poet blood, another dawn comes, another evening falls in my dulcet mind, I am rich with the promise of a middle earth, I am blind to myself." There are some lines you could break up differently to aid the flow..as usual..but there is nothing else i would interfere with since it would run the risk of disturbing the complex weaved thread that leads to the different levels you intend to be found. Keith