rider68

Apr 18, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

NightMares - A Surreal Encounter

Alone by the water’s edge’
Succumbed by notions, playing with my head,
Eyes focused, the moon offering
Ambers; ….. Of shimmering light,

Subdued mellowed, and tranquilised,
Reflections of me peering through,
Casting no shadows, for you to view,
Tree’s swaying in time. to crocking
Bullfrogs enticing their maidens to dine,

Bats in flight, their silhouettes diffused –
Against the night’s bright velvet sky,
Sighting People meandering
In and out of view; ……..Viewing
I’m not sure what; …. Or of whom,

Weightless painless, but sight of ripples
Passing overhead, distant sounds; echoing-
Of Owls chanting, talking, oh
I think their speaking to the dead,

I can see because their back in view,
People peering and their tears
Like pearls, are streaming down,
Bouncing above my head,

I’m worried, and somewhat bemused,
Confused, who’s playing who.-
I’m so scared; it’s like a nightmare come true,
I must move to get a better view,

O….h, God no, No it couldn’t be…..
I can now - clearly see,
There’s me lying in the water
Looking up peering through,

Seeing me; …. Lying submerged,
Amongst the river bed,
The reeds swaying all -
Around my head,

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Barbara Writes

18 years ago

reading was good

Smiles:) Barbara enjoyed the night view

rider68

18 years ago

Thanks Barbara

You seem to be the only fan, Maybe the efforts arn't good enough,? THANKS AS ALWAYS PETER

Barbara Writes

18 years ago

You are welcome

Smiles:) Barbara You are welcome

themoonman

18 years ago

isn't this the same poem.. has it been updated..rewritten..I was going to look back as when I read it I knew I had read it before and I thought I had commented.. anyway... I still like it love the thoughts behind the reflection.. Richard

rider68

18 years ago

Hi Richard

Yes your right, I'd posted in the forum, but wasn't able to pick it up so re-posted with quite abit of amending, I'v struggled with it, hasn't delivered as i'd hoped, still it was different...will keep trying, Thanks for your thought's and comments Very Best Regards Peter

infinite_dwarf

18 years ago

It’s so hard to remember a

It's so hard to remember a dream in all its surrealness. Thanks so much for sharing. ~Lynn (Dwarfie) ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Bush is listening.... use big words!" ~ "Your inferiority complex is better than mine..."

rider68

18 years ago

Hi and Thanks lynn

Its - I think a good thing not to remember most of our dreams, But hoping this stirred a little thought, Very Best Regards Peter

infinite_dwarf

17 years 12 months ago

I agree

And unfortunately, the ones that shake you up good are the ones that usually stay vivid - even though you try desperately hard to get rid of them. I still remember a dream where I was sitting on the floor, my fiance was sitting in a chair, but the chair was really really high up. There was a high-pitched screeching type noise, and I turned around. Behind me was this... I don't even know how to describe it... monster? Entity? Thing? Anyways, it looked like a trap for a head, and yellow eyes. No neck, just this short, stubby body, and feet like one of those waddle toys that you wind up. His jaws snapped around my back - breaking it, and Jon just sat there laughing. I woke up sweating, screaming, confused. Even today I can remember that thing vividly, and it scared the fu** out of me. But I digress... Yeah, this stirred thought all right - now I'm thinking about my dreams. I think a shrink would have a field day with some of them! Keep posting, Peter, I love your work. ~Lynn (Jess K.) ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Last night I lay in bed looking up at the stars in the sky and I thought to myself, where the hell is the ceiling??"

rider68

17 years 12 months ago

Wow What a Nightmare

That was a proper nightmare, isn’t it strange how reality gets thrown on its head, yet we are totally sold on the realistic, Yet really it couldn’t be more from the truth, But the fact is,.....I just wish i could remember them, By the time you blink and stir, I've lost the thread, Thanks Lynn a great moment, and thanks for sharing, If you get a chance Please read A Tribute......See what you think. And Just a Thought! For all the slagging that has been said about the coming of the computer......Isn't Fantastic that a group of likeminded people from around the globe can become united, forging friendships and acquaintances sharing a comman interest, I so glad that I did decide to sign up I very nearly didn't, Have a great Day...Lynn Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

infinite_dwarf

17 years 12 months ago

Too right..

Talk sense, and you're out on your ear. Talk about the fantasy and the things that will come to naught, and you have everyone's rapt attention. I totally agree with your observations of our new techno-savvy world - though I think it means the beginning of the end. We're over our heads, and hyper-extending ourselves way past what is meant to comfortably be. I'll have to find a post that I did some months back regarding that subject... I'll post it here, and invite you (and anyone else who would be interested) to read. I fully maintain that technology is our pitfall. A Tribute: See remarks. I'm glad you did sign up. You write some brilliant work. ~Lynn (Jess K.) ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Last night I lay in bed looking up at the stars in the sky and I thought to myself, where the hell is the ceiling??"