Candlewitch

Apr 14, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Witching Hour

Witching Hour

(Edge's part)

The witching hour strikes

that cruel time of night

once again upon me

sleep is beyond my grasp

while the horrors of my mind

come swirling to manifest

taking corporeal shape

as I reach out for her

to save me from myself

from these apparitions

these clamorous ghosts

from out my past

of lover's I have slain

or abandoned to their shame

rejected all the same

lonely and bewildered

I call out her name

to the midnight winds

oh, Isis, Egyptian queen

then Wait with fevered brow

for her merciful answer..

(Chrys' part)

I and only I fill your

long and restless night

feeling your wanton desire

Hearing your agonized cries

And your fevered brow

will be cooled by these hands

With an abandoned innocence

your dreams fulfilled

Passions fires I will quell

Depravity is the game you play

In your endless ravaging and lust

Come to me oh my dark one

Our night of debauchery has begun

by: Edge and Isis/poewriter58

— Candlewitch, Apr 14, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more., Candlewitch

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Critiques

Rob Graber

18 years 1 month ago

I enjoyed this, especially

I enjoyed this, especially these lines: as I reach out for her to save me from myself from these apparitions these clamorous ghosts from out my past Wonderful!

Candlewitch

18 years 1 month ago

Hi Rob

Thank you for reading and letting me know what you liked about poewriter58's and my poem. Nice to see you here. Always, Cat

dbaker

18 years 1 month ago

I am not a witch. I was at one time handfasted to one. Sadly she went on to the Summerlands before me. Because of her I recognize a lot of the under pinning themes that you have woven into this piece. It seems to me that you call on Isis and ask for her guidance, while at the same time asking for forgiveness; For possibly using Macha and her aspect with the ghosts of past loves. While at the same time you are inviting/invoking The horned one to your bed.The art of creation in of itself is an act of love, mercy and piety I really like this imagery a lot. If you have the time tell me if, I am not far off on the latter part of this poem...I would like to hear what you think about my take. Merry Meet, Merry Met and Merry Meet Again. -DS Baker

Candlewitch

18 years 1 month ago

Hello DS

I am eclectic in my spirituality, which is Earth based. Poewriter58 whom I wrote this with, is not. The first stanza was written by me in my male aspect, Edge. The second half was poewriter58's alter ego, Isis. You are very perceptive in your interpretation. Brightest of Blessings, Cat p.s I am so sorry for your loss...

purplemoondoll

18 years 1 month ago

Great poem, my kind of

Great poem, my kind of theme. I like these lines:- I call out her name to the midnight winds oh, Isis, Egyptian queen then Wait with fevered brow for her merciful answer.. What more can I say - loved it Cat, loved it. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

Candlewitch

18 years 1 month ago

Kaz

Thank you so much for your kind words. I'm pleased that this theme appealed to you. Thank you for taking the time to tell me what you liked about this piece. Always, Cat

dbaker

18 years 1 month ago

Glad to see...

I am happy to see that I can still remember a few things. Thank you...it was a long time and a different lifetime when it happened. All my best. -DS Baker

Calliope

18 years 1 month ago

This was a great poem

I like how you made it a sort of duet instead of just cowriting from one point of view.Nicely done guys, Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.

poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

thank you

Lacy thanks that is the effect we were looking for Chrys

Candlewitch

18 years 1 month ago

Hi Lacy

Thanks so much for reading and leaving a comment. I'm pleased that you like our co-written poem. Always, Cat

professor

18 years 1 month ago

Clamorous ghosts

Great job Ladies and highly atmospheric as well as packed full of mystic allusion. Especially loved "these clamorous ghosts"! Have met a few of those in my time. Some minor points for you are that it should be "wanton" not "wonton" and "Passion's fires" I think. I also felt that the repeat of "lustful" and "lust" within the last three lines detracted a little from the ending. May be "debauched" or "debauchery" could replace one. Finally, perhaps the two longer lines in the last verse could be split: "And your fevered brow will be cooled by these hands With an abandoned innocence your dreams fulfilled" Continue to weave your magic, both. Keith

Candlewitch

18 years 1 month ago

Thank you Keith

Thank you Keith, for reading, and all your helpful suggestions, which I have just implemented. It now reads much more smoothly. I am so pleased that you liked this piece, I'm sure that Chrys is equally pleased. Always, Cat

poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

Keith

I'm sure Cat will thank you Cat please make those revisions as per Keith's suggestions tks thank you Keith Cat and I always did work well together Chrys

Quillsvein1

18 years 1 month ago

this

really reminds me of that song by 10,000 maniacs, "because the night"--not the words at all, but the tone and mood. you start out with a terrifying case of insomnia and decay, and then through grecian symbolism you emerge with a passionate embrace of eroticism. you transform a quite real affliction into beauty. neat!

Candlewitch

18 years 1 month ago

Hi quillsvein1

Thank you so much for your words of high praise. We are glad that you enjoyed the read. Always, Cat

poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

AHHH

Know the song well Isis ( if I may correct you is Egyptian) I am Isis and Cat is Edge thank you for reading Chrys

themoonman

18 years 1 month ago

Hi there ladies..

I had not read this piece before the professor had offered his advice on it.. but I sure loved the last line with that word, debauchery , it was so good.. the whole poem is good you two work well together.. where one left off the other took the ball and ran with it.. an exciting read.. the two of you should do more together.. Richard

poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

Richard

Thank you for taking time out to read this piece we have written another before this one I don't recall if we posted it I think Cat may have glad you liked it Chrys

Candlewitch

18 years 1 month ago

Hi Richard

Thank you for reading and giving your comments. I am pleased that you liked the poem. Chrys and I enjoyed working together on this piece. Always, Cat

rider68

18 years 1 month ago

A Brilliant Account

Worthly Of A Stage Performance The picture - setting to me, Screams of you standing on bastions above the fortified walls, overlooking the sahara, to a reddish sunset sky, Arms outstretched and Isis shadowing above you, I really loved your imagination the alter ego works so well, I applaud you both Edge & Isis, Peter

Candlewitch

18 years 1 month ago

Hi Peter

I love your interpretation, so vivid. You have a graphic imagination, which is great. I think we work well together as my alter ego is on the shady side and Isis is a good influence. Thank you so much for reading! Always, Cat

poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

Peter

Thank you, that is very kind of you Chrys

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

I bow to Edge and Isis for

I bow to Edge and Isis for they are wonderful together ;) great write Ladies ... Love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Jayne

Thank you very much, and I'm sure that Chrys would thank you, too. love, cat