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vague


unformed and anonymous

urgently pinched in waves of finned dispersion

a distant face streaming slowly apart

in the slumping waves of a forgotten pond

a thin river

dry Ophelia, unsure where to fade

carrying bouqets neither real nor artificial

symbiotic petals

christening a sleeping sea with

clear blushes even you don't understand

dry as the brush you were painted with

still not knowing as your sharp cheeks strike the

canvas

my dry Ophelia
— Quillsvein1, Apr 13, 2008

Critiques

RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 3 months ago

Ophelia

has always fascinated me (of course she is one of my poems somewhere as well). What inspired this piece? I'd like to know before I go any further. Ronda
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barbsdad2003

18 years 3 months ago

Alas! I'm sadly uninformed ...

as to the (presumed famous) Ophelia. However, I recognize a vivid description of a painter's work of art, as I think your piece here is. Thanx, Chuck
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hello

This is a haunting piece, and I am as curious about its origins as Ronda. Always, Cat
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purplemoondoll

18 years 3 months ago

symbiotic petals christening

symbiotic petals christening a sleeping sea with clear blushes even you don’t understand Amazing imagery and I love the dreamlike flow to the whole poem. Gentle and beautiful. Chuck is right, this is a work of art on many levels. Great job! Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 1 month ago

ganging up on you here.

Also curious to know if it's Shakespeare's Ophelia you refer to or perhaps Ophelia Crutch? Sorry, that was un-called for. Whoever, whatever, like several of your pieces I have read tonight it is haunting and evocative. cheers, Jess

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