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Day and Night

The day is warm
a still calmness is in the air
the sun lazing above
peaceful serentiy all around

A day to travel
with no place to go
to wander endlessly
let time flow

The breeze sweeps gently
across my face
The warmth of the sun
gives me inner grace

The breeze ripples through
the leaves in the trees
making one flowing movement
like waves in the sea
This continuous flow
all with one mind
the togetherness of nature
all in time

As shadows fall, illusions take form
this transformation eludes the dawn
This definite outline of each form
it looks so different at dusk and dawn
— Electric Blue, Apr 13, 2008

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purplemoondoll

18 years 1 month ago

I like the soft irregular

I like the soft irregular rhyme - it adds a lyrical calm to the whole poem. You captured your theme briliantly. I read this and felt at peace and enchanted by your images. Thank you it's been a tough week, this is just what I needed. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

18 years 1 month ago

day and night

Hi KAZ Well just me walking going nowhere just enjoying being where my footsteps lead me. But i was shopping and every one was rushing about but for me i felt like i was in slow motion not here i was invisible to them I love to create pictures with words I like others to share my journeys you say enchanted. We i only went to get some shopping but i see things others are too busy to notice. I feel so sad for them. love maggie
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Calliope

18 years 1 month ago

I have to agree with Kaz

This was a great poem.I so need a day like that.Thanks for giving me one,lol. This was breeezy and peaceful.Very calming. I loved it. Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
professor

professor

18 years 1 month ago

The calm tranquility

of nature is everywhere in this poem Maggie and i enjoyed it very much. Personally i am not sure the repeated line endings "form" and "dawn" in the last verse really work that well, but the others don't seem to feel the same way. Keith
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

18 years 1 month ago

day and night

Hi Keith As i said before. I walk and take in the peace within amongst the hustle and bustle. people just rush to get where they are going not seewing what is in front of them. Thank you for you comments maggie
dbaker

dbaker

18 years 1 month ago

Lovely images

Nicely put, your piece. Sometimes it is enough that a poet can capture a lovely day. It doesn't always have to be about internal strife or a rant on the cruel world. thank you for posting your piece. All the best! Cheers! -DS Baker
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

18 years 1 month ago

day and night

d baker I am glad i brought some serenity into your day. I like to create pictures with words and take you on my journey where ever that me take me. maggie