infinite_dwarf

Apr 12, 2008 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Dizzy The Mouse

There is a little mouse, his name is Dizzy.
Fat is he, as he's always busy!

Dizzy's home really raises the bar.
He currently resides in the cookie jar.

Without a peep, without a sound.
Dizzy sits in there rootin' around.

Chocolate chip, he doesn't care.
Open the lid, and he is always there.

Finally finished with his prize.
Dizzy sits with an aching belly, a satisfied look in his eyes.

Dizzy isn't much, and isn't dumb.
He's not even greedy, look, he's saved you a crumb.

— infinite_dwarf, Apr 12, 2008

About the Author

Region, Country: North Carolina, USA, USA

Favorite Poets: E.A. Poe, Lewis Carroll, Charles Bukowski, Michael McClure, Lawrence Ferlenghetti.

Critiques

purplemoondoll

18 years 3 months ago

You mean folk like me who

You mean folk like me who won't grow up? lol - this was great fun! Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

Mark

18 years 3 months ago

Cute

Light and airy - refreshing :) I likes, Mark

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Very Nice!

Adorable little poem. You don't do so bad yourself with the children's poems :) Always, Cat

IKnowNoBox

18 years 3 months ago

Well if it a child poem...

then why did it make me laugh....Huh?How and where did that name come about? In ink, Dabbler

infinite_dwarf

18 years 3 months ago

Which name??

Infinite_Dwarf or Guar? Guar has no special significance, just thought it would be a cute name to give a mouse. I like the play on words for Infinite_Dwarf, as it's pretty much both extremes in the name.... besides, my normal screen name for things is six_ft_to_infinity (or variations thereof) and I wanted to keep the 'infinity' theme going. Thanks for stopping in. :~) ~Jess ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ "Johnny was a chemist's son, but Johnny is no more. What Johnny thought was H2O, was really H2SO4."

Janice Pearce

18 years 3 months ago

Guar

Brought a smile to my face, I have a mouse collection, I found it to be nice and light!

weirdelf

18 years 3 months ago

love Guar, even though I wouldn't hesitate to kill him.

See my poem "poor little rat". my favourite mouse poem I saw on a teatowel- There once was a mouse most terrible ticklish who didn't like cheese but was quite fond of liquorice and always did say he would a a good time, with a ripe red radish, a glass of red wine and someone just tickling him all of the time anon cheers, Jess

Amaranthine

18 years 3 months ago

Kids

The kids would adore this. I can imagine it illustrated and in a children's book format - not sure how easy it would be for them to read the name "Guar", but could be a good lesson - even a lesson about saving some for others :0)

Linda Moses

17 years 10 months ago

Jess

This is too cute. Kids would love it, and I do too

rider68

17 years 10 months ago

Magical Jess

Magical whims and fairy tales, it dosen't get any better... Brilliant - Loved it, and a great play with words, As Always..... Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

prayersbyPatty

17 years 10 months ago

Jess

This was very enjoyable. Still being a newbie, I am going to try a poem with just a two line stanza's. Heck with the kids, I must still be one, it was nice to read something magical and light. Patty

poewriter58

17 years 10 months ago

Jess

Still love this one especially since I know where dizzy comes from nice light smiling poem mom

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 10 months ago

Fun, fun, fun

I enjoyed this write, like running around in the playground with my grand children! thanks, Eddie "We know the mysteries of philosophy and of the art of Holy Poetry" By Jose de Diego

Barbara Writes

17 years 10 months ago

Nice one for kids

Smiles:) Barbara I like the child's play image here really good.

barbsdad2003

17 years 10 months ago

Playful humor's ...

nice, esp. when cloaked within the ambience of a child's innocence ... and reasoned logic: Leaving the crumb as a present explains well the telltale evidence. I.e., the additional evidence alongside Dizzy's own presence within the cookie jar. A short bedtime story apt for kids. But we/wee adults like it too. Thanx, Chuck

Arrow

17 years 10 months ago

This is cute.

I wonder how it would roll along with more alliteration. E.g., Without a peep, without a sound. Dizzy sits in there rootin’ around. (Without a squeak, without a sound Dizzy's busy rootin' around.) Always glad to see more kid's poems! Keep it up.

Rett

17 years 10 months ago

Well done Jess K.

Very cute little poem. I really enjoyed it especially right now. I would make one change maybe. Dizzy sits with an aching belly, a satisfied look in his eyes. (An aching belly and satisfied eyes) Wonderful child's poem. Respectfully, Rett: "The only thing observable with the naked eye to exceed the speed of light is rumor" Unknown

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