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Dying Moments


To the bedroom they gathered,Friend’s family, silently standing,Satin silhouetting a once proud man, Tears orchestrated, by his chosen favoured tunes,Chorused with muted tones, of humble sobbing,Drapes letting by; Ambers of shimmering light, Disquietly the gathered, shared in recapturingMemorable times, being looked upon;By Surgeons monitoring vital signs, Timely respectfully, with heads bowed,Affairs spoken and finalized; slowly;One by one; exit’s their way out, Quietly forward from the diminished crowed,A hand stretches out, fingers mingle,Heads turning - eyes find focus, becoming locked, ‘You came’ he utters, and she just smiled, Surgeons fiddle to monitors,Which are now picking up a beat,Tubes pulsing pushing blood, this rekindles,Once silken skin; to colour, a pinkish red, Silently lovingly their thoughts exchange,She whispers ‘Darling’ take me, ride me,Let me see you through; too Heavens gate;Then I will rest, while you walk through, Succumbed, he smiled; Hands entwined, she guides,Offering her breasts for him to explore –For that one - last time, dancing out memories,Lovingly; she roll's out, - her lover's desire,As his Life - quietly ebbed by, 12th April 2008

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years ago

Allot of emotions expressed

Allot of emotions expressed quietly in this poem. That is the way I would want to go, lovingly in bed guided by a caring hand... Very nice one Peter! Always, Cat
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rider68

18 years ago

Thanks Cat

Thanks alot for reading, I know it's not a great subject, but felt that it was good to try, I hope it conveyed well, Thanks again- Very Best Regards Peter
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purplemoondoll

18 years ago

Tricky Subject

Tricky subject to cover but skillfully done. Excellent - I enjoyed this, even though reading made me feel uncomfortable. Thats a good thing though - you captured the theme well. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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rider68

18 years ago

Yes I have to Agree

Hi Kaz Thank you for your comments, I won't make a habbit of this subject, but it was good to cover, and try to create the atmosphere, Hopefully it read well, although i have played around abit with it, Thanks again - Kaz Peter