Mango

Deliciously written sensual and lightly erotic piece. Well done! Always, Cat

Off to the market soon and share the experience :) A savored experience. Mark

i love the first lines! "mango, i shall have an affair with you" great poem with juicy details :) fragile things: take flight!

I'm definitely coming round to share the next one Anna and not just because of the last line..lol. Absolutely my most favourite fruit although frustrating over here because most of the time you have to buy them and let them ripen on the window sill for another week and all that time you are itching to get them stripped off and into your mouth. As for the poem itself well it certainly got me going. Just a couple of possible suggestions. I know you usually have to cut the skin off although with very ripe ones i have been known to peel it off and that "peeling" might be more in keeping with the double entendre that it is actually a man you are undressing...or then again may be not (OK, OK, mangos are better I know. lol). Also I suppose i found the hungry as a wolf in the last verse a little uninventive and was hoping for some other more sensual imagery to portray your appetite. And not a word about line breaks. lol. Keith

Mango is absolutely my favourite fruit, and that is how to eat it, with a fervor that is almost sexual, unregarding of mess or time. Very nicely phrased. The only bit I questioned was the "hungry like a wolf" line, just seemed too cliche for the poem, caused me to hesitate in the enjoyment of feeding on the poem as an alarm went off in the back of my head--why that cliche, now?! Otherwise though, your poem was... succulent.

OK if it is suggestions you want Anna, perhaps "slice" rather than "cut". As for the wolf then you could be very classical and say hungry like Phineas (the guy who was plagued by harpies so he could not eat from a table laden with food replenished every day by the Gods), or perhaps "hungry like a starving fruit-bat", or "hungry like lent". There is of course hungry like a bear or a horse. Or perhaps just "hungry to devour you". You can see I am am used to working up and appetite. lol. Keith

Sumptuous !! You know , it would never fit a male protagonist. A woman devouring the fruit is more emancipating. ;) (on the lighter side)

Oh, I do like the revision! With the addition of the neon red light, the cheap hotel, you've actually made the whole affair seedier (oh the pun, the pun, long live the pun!).

What a pleasure to re-visit the hunger ! Mark

and I like that...I so enjoyed this poem. In ink, Dabbler

This is a Roman orgy of a banquet where purging is the next act to allow for continued repetition... but this time naked! Brian

I guess this is when Neo knew they had their hands full. You are the deepest creature of passion I have ever known. You are quite a match my dear, and a beautiful find my love. B