It's Always You

that the way it flows is really nice I can feel the love and yearning. I kind of stumbled on 'duclet' I'm guessing it was meant to be dulcet? other than that I think it's a great piece. you work great together. kudos =)

This one took awhile but your writing is changing whether fr the good or not(look at your co writer) a side to blistered pen dulcet was used as melodious, agreeable,pleasing hope that claifies that one Chrys

My pleasure now we'll see what other project i can come up with for you lol Chrys

this was very sweet Richard not to mention nicely done, I really liked it when at the end of each stanza it ended with it was always you...beautiful! for me this is one I want to remember when I meet that someone. Marie

your piece here, which I think's quite good, actually ... but my mind took a wayward turn and came up with one word change repeatedly (along with a few others) that makes for an entertaining counter-read, as in: "The distance between me/me evaporates and I’m lost in thoughts of me. My smile dances across time with a strength so often hard to find The laughter I hear is one of a kind And it’s always me. When nighttime falls I can’t wait to dream in the morning my thoughts are where I’ve been and it’s always me. A voice that echoes my rhythm in dulcet tones reassures me that I’ll not be alone Mellowed I sway to its beat Into my reverie I retreat to find it’s always me." For entertainment value only. All in good fun, moonman. Regards (and thanx), Chuck PS: I took the liberty of fixing your "it's" in my rendition, the lonesome word that should've been "its" instead. Also, "nighttime" is corrected spelling.

being this was a co write I cannot answer for Richard but I feel changing it to me would be rather self centered and change the entire meaning of the write but thanks for your rendition Chrys

I liked this, it was simple, melodic and unclouded. The end of the three-line third verse I question, there's an ambiguity there, at least for me. On the one hand, it seems to be flowing along with the lightness and devotion (with a background hint of loss); but on the other, there seems to be an anger: "where we've been/and it's always you." As if to say it was never about me, the writer, and I'm bitter, and that's why we failed. Was this intentional, or just my skewed and jaded mind reading into things, images that just aren't there? Anywho, as I said, nice piece, congratulations on your successful collaboration.

I can only speak for myself but jaded yes. lol wa not my intention at all it took awhile due to Richard's busy schedule but we did it Chrys

the only problem i have with this poem is it has a...emptiness behind it. i can't feel a voice, or voices. i enjoy both of yours poetry very much, and i think the biggest reason is your voices, which get across the feel of you, hold a certain power. again, technically excellent, but left me feeling that behind it, no one was really there. Niki