Raven Rides The Wind

Silky black strands, soon surrender
To long silver locks, that drapes her body
With dyes and rinses, formative years victorious
Curls, a flip of the comb, she is at home

Every two weeks she rides the wind
She sanctions new styles that holds her youth
Like springtime on the horizon, no one recognizes
The glory of Grey ringlets, riding beneath her splendor

At the day ending, the roots of dawn
Makes an entrance once again
Riding the winds she mounts up
To win the war, between the black and silver tresses

— Barbara Writes, Mar 29, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

Critiques

purplemoondoll

18 years 2 months ago

Apart from a couple of

Apart from a couple of typing errors, this was a great read. I know someone like this! I like these lines especially:- Every two weeks she rides the wind She sanctions new styles that hold her youth Like springtime on the horizon I always said the day I go grey is the day the red hair dye comes out :-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

Hi Barbara

This is a delightful take on ageing. I especially like the title and the way you incorporated it into the poem. Very nice! Always, Cat

Barbara Writes

18 years 2 months ago

That I really appreciate that

Barbara Writes

I really appreciate your kind words. I was hoping not to offend, but share the beauty of aging in a positive light. I think silver hair is beautiful as well our natural colors. commenting on it its beauty has gotten me in trouble.

Mark

18 years 2 months ago

cathedra

is really the throne of a bishop but there maybe the meaning of throne alone - not sure but you might want to check it, Barbara. drapes vs drape is a tough call but drape seems proper you might want to check that as well seek vs seeks I believe it would be seeks hmm Makes it entrance vs Make an entrance or Makes it's entrance Astonishing poetry Barbara, really. I enjoy this very much and will surely come back :) Mark

Barbara Writes

18 years 2 months ago

Your advice is always welcome and appreciated

Barbara Writes

I used the dictionary before using and didn't notice this difference. These tired eyes. You are right about cathedra. I was looking for another word for throne. Not what I was looking for I cathedra. Thanks for checking this for me. Will change. Drapes I agree, I made a typo on that one. Seeks, yes what I meant. I seem to be trying to hard at making less typos. Makes an entrance is definitely a better flow. Thanks for liking it and your kind words.

Barbara Writes

18 years 2 months ago

Your advice is always welcome and appreciated

Barbara Writes

I used the dictionary before using and didn't notice this difference. These tired eyes. You are right about cathedra. I was looking for another word for throne. Not what I was looking for I cathedra. Thanks for checking this for me. Will change. What words would be better that mean the same as throne and works well here. Drapes I agree, I made a typo on that one. Seeks, yes what I meant. I seem to be trying to hard at making less typos. Makes an entrance is definitely a better flow. Thanks for liking it and your kind words.

Mark

18 years 2 months ago

Agenda

seek out her agenda she's feeling at home I don't know Barbara it might work :( maybe not for you, it is really up to you :) Mark

Barbara Writes

18 years 2 months ago

Thanks Mark

Barbara Writes

this helped a lot. got me thinking in another direction for my poem to go, that makes for better reading