Lilith ; Part IV

Hi Lacy Hell Has No wrath-Like a woman scorned, It's a great conclusion, and a great story told, quite a cynical sweet revenge, I'll remember not to cross swords with you, For me, it read very well (as usual) Very Best Regards Peter

The first two stanzas are not quite as strong as they could be. Although I've followed these since the first, there are times when I had to think for just a moment about whether a line referred to "him" or "her." If that makes sense. It's all a juggling of the words. The last parts are perfectly wicked. One small thing, mostly for aesthetics, the Roman Numeral four is IV. :) ~ Ronda

You'll know when it feels "right," Lacy. It never works when we force it! Ronda

I overall liked this series. Before your poems, I shamefully had never heard of Lilith and would'nt recognize the name if the letters jumped up and clawed at me. Learn somrthing new everyday, I think that's why I enjoyed this series. You and Candlewitch never cease to impress.

for an end to a series if this is the last you sometimes want a recap almost summary of the prevoius parts.The over all poem series is a theme well used. In ink, dabbler

I see you have revised this now and it works very well in my opinion although for some reason it does not feel as cruel and brutal as some of the previous verses. The only minor comment i have is that the repetition of dominatrix in the third verse after you used it in verse one might perhaps be better avoided since it is such a strong word. Perhaps just "bringer of pain"? Anyway congratulations on your epic poem Lacy...or is there a resurrection, where he gets his own back, part V brewing. lol. Keith