Relish Of Mustard (In all things be consistent.)

it is to be a namer. Such power! I esp. like "they sure got more then expected in Happy County Court on Glad St. and Snicker Ln." Such names, coupled with context, hold meanings so beyond the mundane. Makes your piece here Sparkle Plenty. Yours (and thanx), Chuck PS: And, yes, the work could benefit from an expert proofreader. Kudos to you that you're aware of it.

got a big grin on! gonna send you a pm about editing cheers, Jess

Not much red ink, I think this piece is clever, funny and deeper than it seems, I entirely agree with Chucks comments. [First get that bloody punctuation right! A space after, not before, all commas and stops] Great is this posse of one being many collectively megraze [?] upon this humblologist free from glitter showers already [space] spent cartridges clink muted by the starch treated canvas wallsan [walls and easel] for notional projectionsNeeded [space] transporter Cheap…or lease. In Happy there are still police that do not take their jobs seriously they would like to hand you a smile (see you smiled) Because you knew it would ….oh perhaps mock them which would be followed by sincerity from all witnesses they sure got more then expected in Happy County Court on Glad St. and Snicker Ln. that unflattering day [stanza break] How it happen? Nobody could tell you with a straight face those who could would not under fear of comedy emergence “Where Humor Comes First!” However it happened like all things Un-Happy eventually it went to court (which turned into a circus) complete with peanut vender’s [vendors] every newspaper took a cheap shot at the area behind the author for others some say it went something like below: Insane accusations of manhood Sinful Burlesque Follies Devious yet simple pranks Jolly tales of humiliation,and exploits Key Witnesses where in stitches on the stand [stanza break] Eventually there was a No Moment someone yelled “FOUL” There was a halt of the proceedings to ask whether they meant “Fowl” (which would require no explanation) or Foul Which would need a punchline as well as a detour sign [stanza break] Back to previous tangent half planned interjections spilled out like over loaded Condiments a moment to relish…then back before snickering jurors “How Can this Human Humblologist before you be sane.” An exaggerated Pregnant Pause …. [lose stop] “You the Jury can only judge by his Laughter his use of nonsequility tangents puns as well why this man is a…a A Metaphorical Oracle (in his head).” "….*wink." [stanza break] a disgruntle court jester beats his gavel splits “It is plan,for us to see,that this pathetically sensible creature is mocking us for our mockereous nature… !” unknown to all present this one sentence had an effect quite profound subtle even when reviewed in hind sight,research,and probes such phenomena could only be labeled: Humility Invective Interuptus Social Non-phenomenal Intervention all accounts of the event not nonsensical or unreadable Enough for review Tell that, "That crowd turned into a POLITE RIOT!" "There sat Mustard, in Relish a Hot Dog among Wieners" hope this helps. cheers, Jess

Hmmm, gonna go read back through this, as I think it's quite cool! Unfortunately, my poor tired brain can't piece words together at the moment. sounds pretty good, though! ~Jess ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Bush is listening.... use big words!" ~ I don't SUFFER from insanity, I enjoy every minute of it!"