Lilith ;Part III

The poem is raw with naked emotions and I can feel the subjects wild rage. I like it very much. Well written! Always, Cat

This is just as great as Parts I & II. You know I adore the dark and dangerous nature of this piece. I must also comment on your use of rhyme, which is smooth and easy - not forced into cramming that next word into a spot just because it rhymes with the one above it. This is the type of rhyming poetry that I enjoy. Lovely. One minor suggestion. The "so" in the second from last line might not be necessary. It flows better without it, and I kind of like the repetition of "there" at the beginning of each line. Just something to consider! The ending makes me believe (and hope) that there's another coming! ~ Ronda

"Encapsulating" Stirred my imagination, Chiming in the Banshees wail warning all that she’ll prevail Very Artistic, (Loved It) Peter

Hi Lacy, you have continued that dark threatening tone into this next installment and poetically it flows very well. It is of course left unfunished and i see i have to move on to part IV. lol. I just have a few suggestions to make it a little smoother: Perhaps to increase the line length to - "Cruel vengeance" and the last few lines need to lose a syllable to keep the flow going right to the end so maybe : "so ther'll be another victim ther'll be another page" I will move on to the finale. Keith