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Jacobin Paranoia

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warmth envelops
dissolving the
bustle and noise
liquid stillness
offers but a momentary
tranquil once upon a time
it is so easy to
drift off and forget

here the watery balm
soothes celiac rashes
a moment's reprieve
that shuts out reality
provides sombre retreat
cares float away
until unwanted thoughts
stray with blistered report

it is quite possible
through bolted locks
to lay victim
to home invasion
for someone to play
Corday to one's Marat
a hapless victim stabbed
at home in one's bath



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— crypticbard, Mar 23, 2008

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Region, Country: West Moreton, AUS

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purplemoondoll

18 years 2 months ago

liquid stillness offers but

liquid stillness offers but a momentary tranquil once upon a time it is so easy to drift off and forget This is so very well expressed. Liquid stillness - calm but unsettling at the same time and this follows through with the closing lines - excellent. I really enjoyed reading this :-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

Visions of the French

Visions of the French Revolution are now swimming in my head! Vivid visuals in this excellent piece. Always, Cat
professor

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Bathtime will never be the same!

I really enjoyed this and hard as I tried I could not come up with any suggestions to improve it....other than perhaps continuing it to dwell on the bloody and macabre consequences of the stabbing.lol. On a boring technical note perhaps "once upon a time" should be in inverted commas. Keith
whitetea

whitetea

18 years ago

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this has a very lofty quality to it, your style is something new to me, great work.