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A Lost Heart

I stand on the edge of a cliff,
engulfed by the ugly beauty of loss;
from the abyss below rises dark light
to blind my last legion of Hope.

Before Aurora woke from her slumber
to announce,in Heaven,another dawn;
before day blossomed and night,
as usual,took his daily leave:
she left with a heart I couldn't help but give
and added the last ingredient to my grief.

I wish for a second time could stop,
or at least pretend to slow down;
for my heart'll always do the Samba.
What's left but to let time take it's course?


HEPATICA....Josh Aukins
— slybard, Mar 19, 2008

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Region, Country: Kampala, Uganda, UGA

Favorite Poets: Jonathan Swift, Sarah Kay, William Shakespeare, Elizabeth Browning, Christina Rossetti, Grace Nichols, The Lantern Meet of Poets (the biggest and oldest society of poets in Uganda)

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poewriter58

18 years 2 months ago

oxymorons

Not to sure if ugly beauty works , just sets me off for some reason and the line my heart will always do the Samba well it doesn't seem to fit with the weightiness of the poem perhaps a line such as MY HEART WILL ALWAYS TAKE FLIGHT would work better see what you think it's your poem after all Chrys
slybard

slybard

18 years 2 months ago

you’re right about that

you're right about that third stanza...i've been thinking about it a lot and a i feel it just kinda doesn't fit in...am afraid i don't see anything wrong with "ugly beauty".loss really is ugly...i used the word "samba" simply to rhyme with "slumber" but it does make sense to me.i've seen people dance the samba at carnivals and our subject's heart beats that first in the presence of his beloved...
themoonman

themoonman

18 years 2 months ago

Hi slybard...

I don't usually disagree with Chrys..but I think that the oxymorons work here..and there can be both ugliness and beauty in loss..personally I didn't like the samba line..it doesn't go with the rest of the poem..but if you think about the oxymorons already contained..it does. I love it when a poem makes me work to understand it, but doesn't leave it impossible to get my own meanings from. thanks for posting.
slybard

slybard

18 years 2 months ago

thanx…am going to make

thanx...am going to make some revisions and i know i have to let go of that samba line or the whole third stanza.. Josh