Universe

My love
we ride on the dust of a comet
On the crest of the milky way
We are lost inside ourselves
within the interlacing
of our souls
somewhere through the
intersection of
space and time

— Electric Blue, Mar 18, 2008

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professor

18 years 2 months ago

Cosmic ride

I know the feeling Maggie lol. Sometimes not even the Universe is enough to contain the journey. Thanks for sharing your cosmic ride. Keith

Electric Blue

17 years 8 months ago

Hi Keith Well i seem to be in this space often as i love to travel with and without wings just to be part of the awesome amazing space of the innerself and the ourter self beyond all the star systems i find this serene but exciting maybe i should be an astranaught. i would love the chance. but there is so much beauty here for those who open their eyes I have been hurt many times but somehow i see the colours of the universe before me and i am drawn to follow where ever it leads me. Maggie R I hope you find your universe.

Alobar

18 years 2 months ago

The complete absence of

The complete absence of punctuation makes this poem a difficult read, and makes the eventual understanding of the flow all the more rewarding. I very much enjoyed reading it--after I got a handle of how it was all supposed to go--and while it is so simple, it is also so very effective to invoke a sense of... love, within the vastness space.

Electric Blue

18 years 2 months ago

universe

Hell my friend I feel that the moment became so intense to let go of all order with not control to let go completely i think very few people can ever do this but if you can it is unbelievable. but the letting go is beyond your own control it is you give youself so you become one but not a physical being anymore but you travel somewhere to the unknown and experience something so awesome it is not a place you can just go to again as you have no control. but it was hard to tell if it is the universe of the innerself or the universe we believe is out there-- but what a journey. I do hope i will get to go there again sometime but if i do i know it will never be the same as it will be new again................

Lonnie

17 years 6 months ago

Lovely sentiments, Maggie!

Glad I have the priviledge of knowing such a sensitive and sensuous soul as you seem to possess! Great work!