Unanswered Love

When queries unanswered stand
a mind is forced to understand
the full extent to which seams
are obliterated or so it seems.
for the lavendars and lotuses bloom in vain
no matter the tune of the rain;
and the loud sound of silence,undetered as yet,
rises a notch higher in respect!

REFLECTIONS FROM ZEUS AND APOLLO....JOSH AUKINS

— slybard, Mar 18, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Kampala, Uganda, UGA

Favorite Poets: Jonathan Swift, Sarah Kay, William Shakespeare, Elizabeth Browning, Christina Rossetti, Grace Nichols, The Lantern Meet of Poets (the biggest and oldest society of poets in Uganda)

Critiques

poewriter58

18 years 2 months ago

“For the lavender and

"For the lavender and lotuses bloom in vain" what a line silence-if you listen isn't silent at all and most times no answer is the answer glad you finally got this posted Chrys

slybard

18 years 2 months ago

thanx

thanx...it's the first poem in which i've used an oxymoron...and from what you just said,i think my experiment was successful. Josh

Kieran Nelson

18 years 2 months ago

Hi, I wasn’t a huge fan,

Hi, I wasn't a huge fan, basically just down to the rhythm in the lines, I don't think it flows very well, especially in line 3. I know it's freeform, but it jsut doesn't read nice, you might want to have a look at the syllable lengths of each line, either that or the punctuation. Kieran "Mind, how you go!" - Roger McGough's poem for LSD Awareness Week

slybard

18 years 2 months ago

it’s not usually my thing

it's not usually my thing to have perfect syllable lengths...it's somehow against my whole idea of life,that nothing is perfect...thanx for the comment though and i understand that you're entitled to your opinion...thanx all the same Josh

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

I think it flows well and is

I think it flows well and is a lovely little piece containing rich imagery. Always, Cat

slybard

18 years 2 months ago

Thanx Cat… Josh

Thanx Cat... Josh