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The Poem

If all the wishes
        in all the world
                could all come true

Then all the girls
        in all the worlds
                 would all look like you

All the birds
        in all the lands
                  would all sing your name

And all the songs
        that were then sung
                  would celebrate the same

So come, give-in
        come be with me
                   let us share a life

Let I to you
        and you to me
                   become, then, my wife

That is the wish
         in all the world
                   that I’d wish come true

That all the girls
         in all the worlds
                   suddenly look like you

And all the birds
         across the lands
                    are singing your name

And all the songs
         that they sing
                     celebrate the same

And all the songs
         that they sing
                      celebrate the same.

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 1 month ago

Hello

I'm no genius, but I like the poem and the repetition didn't bother me. The presentation is playful and very attractive. It is an easy read that rolls right off the tongue. That's my opinion. Always, Cat
Jonathan Moore

Jonathan Moore

18 years 1 month ago

I believe the repetition works

and the structure breaks up what could become a sing-song disposition. I have a predisposition against most love poetry but this is clean and angst less and does not declare you are the only person who has every felt X. Whatever X might be. So yes, it's a pretty poem and would light the day of the recipient.
P

poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

On the contrary

I found the repetition to be a bit much( couldn't help but think of Mary had a Little Lamb sorry) the lightness of the poem works though well you did ask Chrys
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Alobar

18 years 1 month ago

I was afraid of exactly

I was afraid of exactly that, but it is just a piece of light fluff after all. I don't think I will spend anymore time on it. Thanks.
C

Calliope

18 years 1 month ago

I do think its pretty

The repetition makes it so ,IMO.Don't ,your words,spend any more time on it.It's perfect. Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.