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IKnowNoBox
Mar 14, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Hack Script

morbid bits in bit size morsels

a nap from surreality

you should blink

 

that grin?

those sneers

what doses we do

 

ignorant idiom colonic

seas of sensibility

some what like jello

 

witness freak!

reason shredded

into pixels you stare

 

what of network dreamers?

twitch sit twitter

put your faith in a box

 

— IKnowNoBox, Mar 14, 2008

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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Conect11

18 years 2 months ago

I feel like

I just got slapped by Ken Kesey... weird... Why do I suddenly feel, "Californian?" All is well, and I hope for you too. Mark W.
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Alobar

18 years 2 months ago

After I read it a couple of

After I read it a couple of times I began to smile as the realization came over me that I'm reading this poem on this computer monitor, this box. Your words are jumpy, almost frenetic, creates great effect, jarring though--I think I will wait 'til my stomach settles before reading another of your poems. (But I will read another, oh yes, I will read another)
Frost Smith

Frost Smith

18 years 2 months ago

IKnowNoBox...

Seas like jello; very cool I like the abstractness; but makes it difficult to make any suggestive improvements; not I that I would change anything. Much respect, Frost
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 2 months ago

Thanks Frost

The abstract fit has been in everything I wrote for the last week and I hesitate to post some of that as Alobar stated on another poem I posted I have reactionary issues right now that he caught in my writing without follow through(does not make for complete absorbtion of a poem.) But this had to be done and I did it with a short written draft first,my friends roommate thinks it insults people that watch TV....ummm I wonder what made him think that? In ink, Dabbler
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purplemoondoll

18 years 2 months ago

Cleverly written. very

Cleverly written. very clever. I like the 'jar' it works well. I really liked these lines :- ignorant idiom colonic seas of sensibility some what like jello Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 2 months ago

Thank you Kaz

that stanza is sort of directed at commercials and the way they have begun to place them.I house sat for a friend and I watched Telivision for the first time (with the exception of DVD Movies and pre recorded documentaries) in many years and I wrote this shortly after. In ink, Dabbler
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

Ah ha, so that is how this

Ah ha, so that is how this abstract, slightly surreal poem has come about! The only thing I watch off of broadcast is the morning news, at 3 a.m. I too, like the seas of jello Always, Cat p.s. The poem "Cutter's Circle" has now been updated.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 1 month ago

Thanks Jess Daze Tubes Must Die

We have computers now we are better then TV. They (the TV Corps.)feared they would loss the viewers... they where wrong they let Tivo Go off with only a little grumble to salvage what they thought was a threat to their hold on the Masses. In ink, Dabbler