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poetryman
poetryman
Mar 14, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

I Trip on My Poems

 

I Trip on My PoemsBy Michael Lee Johnson In the night when poemsare born, I search for no onebut the hidden words.Conjunctions are just meeting placeslike personal ads for wild women.Even my lady friend criticizes mefor being uncreative, disconnected,a time degenerate.The secrets stretch inside my metaphors, Ican’t find them all.I miss spell check;grammar is a liar;syntax is drug substance I refuseto understand.I’m a trouble-free minded poetwith the training of an uncultivated monster;I chew on my experiences, go backto the prey, the kill, usually alone and spit.But I have no sense of formality.Even near my tender momentswhen the images blossom into rain flowersI trip on stems cut my way lose to nowhere.I go there to see what I can find. -2007-

 

— poetryman, Mar 14, 2008

About the Author

Region, Country: Illinois, USA

Favorite Poets: Heavily influenced by Carl Sandburg, Robert Frost, William Carlos Williams, Irving Layton, Leonard Cohen, and Allen Ginsberg, and Charles Bukowski.

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eric ashford

18 years 3 months ago

Poems about poems (or the

Poems about poems (or the creative inner process) can be tricky. "Conjunctions are just meeting places like personal ads for wild women." Great image! I don't think the folowing adds to the poem but rather drains its energy- "Even my lady friend criticizes me for being uncreative, disconnected, a time degenerate." Good poem. I am reminded of the Bokonnon quote- "Let your life be the poem you write" Really like the last lines- "I trip on stems cut my way lose to nowhere. I go there to see what I can find." All the best eric
poetryman

poetryman

18 years 3 months ago

Response to Eric

Michael Lee Johnson I tend to agree with you Eric and your suggestion is going to be taken seriously. Very good comments. Michael Lee Johnson
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Calliope

18 years 3 months ago

I loved this!

It was very well tripped over and hope you do so again,lol.Bravo! Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
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Alobar

18 years 3 months ago

This strikes me more as a

This strikes me more as a biography, a dust-jacket blurb, than a true poem. Liked your phrasing and your humour however, and would be interested to read more poems, should they find their way to my eyes, serendipitously or otherwise.
poetryman

poetryman

18 years 3 months ago

Gang how are you?

I want to thank all you that leave comments. When you are alone and write poetry you have no one to try them on but yourself and yourself is never a good critic. I usually test them here before the go for publication. Your comments are creative and very perceptive-I thank you so much. Michael Lee Johnson
themoonman

themoonman

18 years 3 months ago

Hi Michael...

Glad to see a poem like this to comment on..very well written..it paints a picture for the reader and for a poet it hits home..my only suggestion is in the third line...but the hidden words..maybe..only the hidden words..just a suggestion...loved the poem...thanks for letting us read.

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