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Manic is the Dark Night: Michael Lee Johnson, Itasca, IL Author of The Lost American: From Exile to Freedom

Manic is the Dark Night By Michael Lee Johnson Deep into the forest the trees have turned black, and the sun has disappeared in the distance beneath the earth line, leaving the sky a palette of grays sheltering the pine trees with pitch-tar shadows. It is here in this black and sky gray the mind turns psycho tosses norms and pathos into a ground cellar of hell, tosses words out through the teeth. “Don’t smile or act funny, try to be cute with me; how can I help you today out of your depression?” I feel jubilant, I feel over the moon with euphoric gaiety. Damn I just feel happy! Back into the wood of somberness back into the twigs, sedated the psychiatrist scribbles, notes, nonsense on a pad of yellow paper: “mania, oh yes, mania, I prescribe lithium, do I need to call the police?” No sir, back into the dark woods I go. Controlled, to get my meds. I twist and rearrange my smile, crooked, to fit the immediate need. Deep in my forest the trees have turned black again, to satisfy the conveyer-- the Lord of the dark wood. -2007- Submit your poems to this internation published poet: Additional poetry sites, all accepting submissions, by Michael Lee Johnson: http://birdsbywindow.blogspot.com/ http://www.poetriclegacy.mysite.com/ http://atendertouch.blogspot.com/ http://wizardsofthewind.blogspot.com/ EDITOR: Michael Lee Johnson, Author of: The Lost American: From Exile to Freedom http://www.iuniverse.com/bookstore/book_detail.asp?isbn=0-595-46091-7 Author’s website: http://poetryman.mysite.com/
— poetryman, Mar 13, 2008

About the Author

Region, Country: Illinois, USA

Favorite Poets: Heavily influenced by Carl Sandburg, Robert Frost, William Carlos Williams, Irving Layton, Leonard Cohen, and Allen Ginsberg, and Charles Bukowski.

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eric ashford

18 years 3 months ago

Yes, depression does feel

Yes, depression does feel like being hemmed in by dark trees. Liked the poem, lots of originality. For me there was too much preamble. I was begining to lose interest in it but then it got down into something real. If it were mine, I would cut- "in the distance beneath the earth line, leaving the sky a palette of grays sheltering the pine trees with pitch-tar shadows." Its not germain to the poem and does not move the action on, but rather slows it down. I would also cut- "the conveyer" from the penultimate line. The above suggestions are just my preference feel free to ignore. Good poem All the best eric
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 3 months ago

Hello,

Having O.C.D., D.I.D. and depression I can really relate to the "dark trees" of this piece. My favorite lines of your poem are: "the trees have turned black again, to satisfy the conveyer– the Lord of the dark wood." Cat

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