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Striving For The Stars

To cry

A goal as virtuous as love

Charity

Or peace

A goal as lonely

As sacrifice

As difficult as the moon

As beautiful as the stars

Like tiny teardrops themselves.

 

In striving for thee

I miss thee

In achieving thee

I, myself, am missed

O great irony

To weep

To succeed

And to weep

O great irony is man

Sunken in the Earth

Forever denied the stars...

Weep for him.

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Calliope

18 years 1 month ago

Excellent flow .

I really liked this concept,good imagery ,intent was clear,very well written.Good one, Poet. Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
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purplemoondoll

18 years 1 month ago

I really enjoyed the flow

I really enjoyed the flow and imagery. I think the only phrase I struggled with a little was 'as difficult as the moon'? I couldn't quite get the connection. Apart from that this was a great read. I look forward to seeing more of yourwork. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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Alobar

18 years 1 month ago

I think what makes the moon

I think what makes the moon difficult to me is that it is not constant, at least in the day-to-day sense. It has phases, sometimes full, sometimes only showing up half way, etc.; also, it comes up at different times, it can be night or day. And of course there is the whole madness connection. The other difficulty of the moon, is more history based--we had to get there, and that was no easy feat! It is difficult in the same way as Mt. Everest's peak was difficult. It is in Man's goals to "achieve the stars," but we have not come close yet, it is still seemingly impossible. The moon, difficult though it was, we achieved. Does that explain my symbol? Thanks muchly for the comments.
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purplemoondoll

18 years 1 month ago

thanks for coming back on

thanks for coming back on that. Now I see the connection. A very well thought through and beautifully crafted poem - nice work! Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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Calliope

18 years 1 month ago

Yes I think ...

...your comments on the 'difficulty of the moon' Makes this poem better to me,lol.Very clever! Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
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orgami

18 years 1 month ago

left turn lane

Loved the moon line Moon only makes left turns and doesnt spin this is a great work well paced love the last stanza O